[philaturner]

Hi Everyone

My first song with a steel guitar.

Phil

https://soundcloud.com/phil-turner/round-round

Round and Around

 Both of us keep shouting the same cruel words
Both of us keep slamming the same front door
Both of us keep fighting the same old fight
And both of us will say “well it’s not my fault”
We’ve tried to change
To smile not blame
But here we are again
Still giving out the pain
Chorus 1
Round and around we go each day
Breaking our hearts in different ways
When will we stop oh I don’t know
Here comes the pain, here comes the pain again
Verse 2
We keep going over the same old ground
Dance around the problems we lock them up
We are like a grey day that never ends
Fire and water don’t mix well that’s like us
We’ve had a chance
It’s time to pass
Some things aren’t meant to be
I guess we both can see, oh that
Chorus 2
Round and around we go each day
Breaking our hearts in different ways
I think it is time that we both stopped
That we both got off, got off this carousel
Middle 8
I wish you luck, in all you do
I hope your skies, are always blue
Chorus 3
Round and around we go each day
Breaking our hearts in different ways
I think it is time that we both stopped
That we both got off, got off this carousel

[diademgrove]

Hi Phil,

loved the steel guitar playing, made the song for me. My only suggestion would be to take the last note of the verse down rather than up. To me the verse ends on a sad note which is contradicted a little by the music.

If you disagree please ignore me.

Other than that I thought it is a really strong song which is well sung.

diadem

[S.T.C]

This is a pretty good song..like the vocalist,instruments all seemed nicely balanced  in the mix...its easy on the ear,,,and the slide guitar is nice...and whilst typing i'm getting an earful of `wrong`..which even better ....

I now mainly focus on Americana ,but not totally ..and this is good stuff,

[TheButcher]

Your voice is brilliant - the songwriting is very catchy - could play on the radio.

The mix sounds very good.

[The wizaird]

Great song ... I used to play a little guitar, sounds professional
Keep up the good work, hope it works out for you

[Neil C]

Nice gentle tune, sympathetically arranged including pedal steel. I liked the female vocals especially on the higher registers. I
n agreement with the learned diadem grove about the vocals on the chorus when it goes too low - the words and melody become indistinct e.g. "Here comes the pain, here comes the pain again'
Q is the pedal steel a real one or a virtual?
Good luck
 
Neil

[mickeytwonames]

Crisp and Clean arrangement - good work

[Boydie]

This is beautiful!!!!

The vocal reminds me of Colbie Callait (which is a VERY big compliment as she is one of my favourite singers)

The steel guitar fits perfectly, as does the rest of the instrumentation

I just think the track needs a slightly stronger "hook"

Much of the song is building up to a killer chorus but I don't think it quite gets there for the "pay off"

The "round and around" is a great lyric and I think the song should "go up a gear" at this point but it kinda stays at the same level for me

This is me being ultra picky as I think the song is really (really really) good

I could listen to this type of stuff all day

[tokenangmoh]

Hello.

Wonderful sound, excellent mix and I love the vocal performance. This is very listenable indeed.

I agree with Boydie that the chorus is close to taking off but just falls the tiniest bit short...

My only other thing is that this feels like the kind of song that should rhyme rather more than it does. I think that might help cement its lyrics.

Matt

[fischermans]

Very very good. Definitely 10 of 10 points.Nothing to criticize.Is it you who is singing?
Enjoyed listening thanks for sharing.
Alexander

[Kevin j]

great song! really good vocal, and i really like the melody, nothing i can fault

[Princeps]

Good God, this is awesome. Production values are amazing, too. Nice one.

[ShinyThang]

Lovely sound and crystal recording. Slide work is extremely well executed as is all of the instrumentation. Very nice harmonies.

I felt that the 'fire & water don't mix' line was rushed and may work better with 'fire & ice don't blend' ?

The mid - 8 seemed a bit 'bolted on'. I think if you drop the 2 empty bars immediately after it and go straight into the instrumental chorus it might work better. Just a thought.

Nice song performed really well.