[jtgautreau]

Here's a song I wrote that'll be on my next E.P.  The tittle is Little Lady

Lyrics: the song is about a mentally disturbed person in a mental asylum that has created a woman in his mind.

Music: I'm recording the song for the album version, but this is how I perform it. This particular video is the only one I have of the song live, recorded and I went a bit too long here and there trying to create ambiance with the loop pedal (that's how I perform live, ala Ed Sheeran). The song will be shortened a bit and won't have the middle section that has the little john mayer Clarity cover (I throw that in there as a crowd pleaser live.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U6Aafpa9cnY

LYRICS:


Little Lady:

Little woman little lady where are you tonight
your smell and your scent are scattered in me
I'm left here without no words, no thoughts on
you anymore, don't know what to do….

Little woman little lady please don't bring me down
In the streets were we met, the streets ain't the same
steps marked up in the snow, all the cigarette
burnt light up, you're my little lady.

Little lady
Please come back to me
Little lady
In a senseless dream
  
Little woman little lady walking pass by me
I see your silhouette, I don't want to pretend
Meaningful shadows playing, twisted games in
my head, I think I am going insane

Little woman little lady, come land me a hand
you know it's all your fault you did this to me
you premeditated it all, then covered your tracks
alone, you're my little lady

I don't know if you're real anymore
The window's open and the air is cold
Very cold
Chili cold

[hardtwistmusic]

Here's a song I wrote that'll be on my next E.P.  The tittle is Little Lady

Lyrics: the song is about a mentally disturbed person in a mental asylum that has created a woman in his mind.

Music: I'm recording the song for the album version, but this is how I perform it. This particular video is the only one I have of the song live, recorded and I went a bit too long here and there trying to create ambiance with the loop pedal (that's how I perform live, ala Ed Sheeran). The song will be shortened a bit and won't have the middle section that has the little john mayer Clarity cover (I throw that in there as a crowd pleaser live.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U6Aafpa9cnY

LYRICS:


Little Lady:

Little woman little lady where are you tonight
your smell and your scent are scattered in me
I'm left here without no words, no thoughts on
you anymore, don't know what to do….

Little woman little lady please don't bring me down
In the streets were we met, the streets ain't the same
steps marked up in the snow, all the cigarette
burnt light up, you're my little lady.

Little lady
Please come back to me
Little lady
In a senseless dream
  
Little woman little lady walking pass by me
I see your silhouette, I don't want to pretend
Meaningful shadows playing, twisted games in
my head, I think I am going insane

Little woman little lady, come land me a hand
you know it's all your fault you did this to me
you premeditated it all, then covered your tracks
alone, you're my little lady

I don't know if you're real anymore
The window's open and the air is cold
Very cold
Chili cold

[jtgautreau]

hey man, your comment doesn't show. IF you can write it again

cheers.

[hardtwistmusic]

I didn't send the review because I was reading the lyric again, and realized I didn't totally get what it was about.  Wanted to listen and read several times and fully "get" it - then review.

I'm still not there.  I must have accidentally hit the post button before I cancelled out. This is a complex lyric, and I want to do it justice when I review.  I WILL leave you feedback.

[hardtwistmusic]

Okay.... here is my input.  I didn't read your description thoroughly enough, and I didn't know that this mentally ill person was making this woman up. 

So as I read/listened to the lyric, questions arose.... confusion arose. 

THEN.... I figured out that since he's mentally ill, she MIGHT BE imaginary.  Figuring it out for myself MADE the song for me. 

Only then did I go back and find out that you had already told me that.

My only suggestion is DON'T tell your audience she's imaginary. 

Maybe provide some more obvious clues in the lyric, but an audience will almost always appreciate and remember something they figure out themselves better than something they are given. 

For me, the song has way more meaning because I figured it out before I realized I had already been told.

[jtgautreau]

thank you very much man, means a lot you took the time to study this.

I dropped a few hints in the song so you can figure out it's an imaginary woman, but for sure each one will give the song their especial meaning, which is always nice right?

for example:


Little lady
Please come back to me
Little lady
In a senseless dream

also

Little woman little lady walking pass by me
I see your silhouette, I don't want to pretend
Meaningful shadows playing, twisted games in
my head, I think I am going insane

I don't know if you're real anymore
The window's open and the air is cold
Very cold
Chili cold

[jmacdon]

Hi JTP.  I love the catchy guitar riff - real foot-tapping and a great song to hear live.   Although the English lyrics do tell an intriguing story about this imaginary lady - I'll suggest something odd here.  Why not sing the song in Spanish.  At the risk of losing the lyrics (to an English audience), I suspect the change in language would suit this song much better.   

PS - that theatre looks great. I would love to bang out a couple of piano tracks there :-)

[jtgautreau]

thank you very much man. I usually write in a language and tend not to translate. This song was born in english and it'd be hard for me to translate it and make it work. I appreciate your suggestion though.

This one is going to my english EP.

cheers and greatly appreciated.