[Paulski]

Hi everyone
Almost completed this song.
I do lyrics and music and record simultaneously but still need to add last chorus
which has different lyrics.
Update - see lyrics below.
Any comments are welcome - keeping in mind it's not finished.

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/when-love-came-to-your-door

Thanks!
Paul

When Love Came to your Door
Copyright © 2013 Tennyson Road Music

intro

He picked up the photograph that had fluttered down to the floor.
He tried to convince himself to put it back in the drawer.
A world taken long ago among Autumn's golden leaves
from a girl that he used to know and the young man he used to be.

Through the blinds tapped the sound of rain
As his mind wrapped around a dream
The boy in the picture wept
And he sang to him as he slept:

"When Love came to your door,
You heard Her knocking
But you didn't bother to let Her come in
When Love called out your name,
You didn't answer
You knew it was Her but you were so sure She'd call again"

He awoke when the storm had passed and left the sky in the grip of grey.
Like a drop running down the glass, he realized he'd let love slip away
Oh he thought he could leave all the dreams behind him
And he thought he believed love was dead
But the voices that rage in his head remind him
Of the choices he made instead

"When Love came to your door,
You heard Her knocking
But you didn't bother to let Her come in
When Love called out your name,
You didn't answer
You knew it was Her but you were so sure She'd call again"

Guitar solo

When love comes to your door,
You'd better wake up!
Open the gate up and let Her come in!
When love calls out your name,
You'd better answer
You'll know when it's her
But you can't be sure she'll call again

You'll know when it's her
But you can never be sure.. she'll call again

[hardtwistmusic]

First thought was "great voice." 

The lyrics seemed forced and complex as read, but the way you sang them, that wasn't a problem. 

Very nice instrumental accompaniment. 

I thought there could have been a bit more variety in the instrumental part of the song... perhaps some more short instrumental bridges.

Overall, very good song imo.

[terrysains]

Nice title, good story excellent lyrics. I think you should spend as much time on the melody as you have the lyrics, it feels like the words fit, that tune  will do. Potential. Terry.

[Paulski]

First thought was "great voice." 

The lyrics seemed forced and complex as read, but the way you sang them, that wasn't a problem. 

Very nice instrumental accompaniment. 

I thought there could have been a bit more variety in the instrumental part of the song... perhaps some more short instrumental bridges.

Overall, very good song imo.

Hi
Thanks for the comments - and the comps on my vocals.
For sure, I need to develop the instrumentation better as the song progresses - it's pretty much a cut-and-paste at this point. I don't want to make it any longer, so probably will do some guitar fills and change up the drums in verse 2 and 3.
Thanks again
Paul

[Paulski]

Nice title, good story excellent lyrics. I think you should spend as much time on the melody as you have the lyrics, it feels like the words fit, that tune  will do. Potential. Terry.

Hi Terry
Thanks for the posting. Hopefully the melody will stand out a bit better in my final version.
cheers
Paul

[jmacdon]

Hi Paul,

This song is broadway through and through.  In fact, I was thinking of Dave Willetts when I heard you sing this.  There are James Bond-esque moments too.  Love it.  Well done!

[Paulski]

Hi Paul,

This song is broadway through and through.  In fact, I was thinking of Dave Willetts when I heard you sing this.  There are James Bond-esque moments too.  Love it.  Well done!

Hey jmacdon - thanks for the comment. This started out as a "hotel California" look-alike but evolved into something quite different. Glad you liked it!
Best
Paul

[beckylucythomas]

I love the concept you have here, lyrics really sound out, and the musical setting is pretty good already, but I'm sure you're gonna make it even better.... It's very musical theatre, so i reckon a big/huge climax to the song would be awesome! From the intro i was expecting something very quiet and folky, so the vocal was a surprise when it came in like a broadway stage star!

[Paulski]

I love the concept you have here, lyrics really sound out, and the musical setting is pretty good already, but I'm sure you're gonna make it even better.... It's very musical theatre, so i reckon a big/huge climax to the song would be awesome! From the intro i was expecting something very quiet and folky, so the vocal was a surprise when it came in like a broadway stage star!

Hi caco
Never been called that before - appreciate the compliment!
Yeah - the last chorus after the lift should bring it home if I'm up to singing up a key.
Thanks again
Paul

[Boydie]

What a fantastic vocal!

This song is broadway through and through.  In fact, I was thinking of Dave Willetts when I heard you sing this.  There are James Bond-esque moments too.  Love it.  Well done!

JMACDON has pretty much nailed it for me

I think I can hear a bit of "clipping" in the track so if you are going back through it I would double check the levels

This seems like "We Will Rock You" meets "Aspects Of Love" - great stuff

[Paulski]

What a fantastic vocal!

This song is broadway through and through.  In fact, I was thinking of Dave Willetts when I heard you sing this.  There are James Bond-esque moments too.  Love it.  Well done!

JMACDON has pretty much nailed it for me

I think I can hear a bit of "clipping" in the track so if you are going back through it I would double check the levels

This seems like "We Will Rock You" meets "Aspects Of Love" - great stuff

Thanks so much for the kind words.
I need to add the last chorus after the lift so I will look at that clipping issue.
Best
Paul

[RyanHalsey]

Really nice chord progression in the guitar, great stuff paul

Ryan

[Paulski]

Really nice chord progression in the guitar, great stuff paul
Ryan

Thanks Ryan!