[Jamie]

https://soundcloud.com/jamie1802/red-shift

I was reading an article on astronomy and quantum physics and the essence of the article was that there are competing theories on most areas surrounding the 'big bang' , whether the universe is expanding or not, and what the eventual fate of the universe could be. Prof Hubble theorised that the universe was expanding because the he detected 'red shift' which is evident in the light coming from far out in the galaxy and this suggests the universe is expand. So here's a song about it, and it could all come to a sudden end!

This is a rough demo it's a sort of rocky song maybe Muse /Rush style?

Red Shift

Red shift appears as galaxies expand
Touched by science or Gods great hand?
We started together and now we're apart
Is it the end or is it the start?

The journey to havoc a roller coaster ride
At the speed of light with nowhere to hide

Theories and propositions where do we go?
Symptoms or indicators of what? We don't know!
We need dark matter to make it all make sense
Horizons or flatness we need evidence

Into the darkness there is no other place
and in the end there's a truth we must face

The galaxies expanding or so we believe
The scale of it all is so hard to conceive
Where is it going and where will it end?
The crunch or the freeze? Take a guess my friend.
 

[jmacdon]

hmmmm, reading an article does not make you an expert! But the emotion of your song forgives this.....there is great potential here, maybe you ought to consult Mr Dawkins first, then maybe edit the lyrics to reflect this......but i'm subscribed!  Continue to entertain us :-)

[nooms]

this is terrific
think your vocal really brings it to life
reading the words before hand id almost walked away but soon as you started singing it took off..
great committment in your voice..

thought the song pushed it just a little too far lengthwise, seems to lose a little power in the final furlong when it should get even bigger if you want to sustain its length.

but really enjoyed it

[Dave Bradley]

Great title! An uber-prog topic. Smashing.

[Jamie]

Hi guys, thanks for the feedback

JMAC I didn't quite get the Dawkins ref I presume it's religious in nature? I don't profess to be an expert (on anything )but  that wont stop me writing about it.Glad you were entertained

Nooms -thanks ref the vocals I did them several times before getting to the recorded version and still not happy with them.Yes I recognise that there is still something missing to sustain the song to the end, but its a work in progress!

Sciencebase I knew you would comment on this because of the topic Glad you liked it.

Cheers

 Jamie

[KristoferPetersen]

I'm just writing my thoughts down while listening to the song.

The sound has a certain 80s vibe, your voice fits perfectly to that. I like it.
I think that the lyrics are improveable.  Maybe you could try to be less concrete with the message. (god vs. science, the limitations of human understanding, and so on.)

[KristoferPetersen]

sorry, double post. delete please.

[Alan Starkie]

Hi Jamie,

Very prog/old school song.

I'd pay a little more attention to the double tracked vox to make sure they're as close as poss to each other as they tend to split in places. Over all though, a good vocal take.

The subject matter is good and you've invested time in getting the facts in there.

Well done man.

Alan.

[Jamie]

Hi guys thanks for the feedback

Hi Kristofer . welcome to the forum. I liked your post on new songs,really nice vocal performance. Not sure about the delay,but a good post. I'm reasonably happy with the lyrics in my song, I believe I achieved more or less what I set out to say. Glad you liked the song and the vocal.

Hi Alan, Glad you liked it, I was going for a rock/prog sound in the style of Muse, so I hope I got near. Yes I know the vox split, but I didn't want to spend any more time on a demo. As you know its hard to get them closely synced enough without specialist software. Hopefully I'll get closer when I record the final version. I also want to find another idea or variation to sustain the interest to the end, even I feel it's running out of steam in the last section.

Thanks again and cheers

Jamie

[Stylus]

Hi Jamie  good mixing & levels & I think you have the vocals sounding on cue with the flow & type of
melody...  cuts off a bit abrubt?  but    well thought out               Cheerzzzzz   Stylus:)