[Kafla's Evil Twin]

How weird to have a song with the same title right in front of mine 

I have posted this in the lyrics section and I have been extremely impressed with the feedback I have received - so I have made a quick iphone recording of the melody and chords and if I get any feedback here I will use it all to make the song better 

https://soundcloud.com/big-dong/into-the-light

Into the light

They don't understand us
They'll never click
And they'll laugh at you when your back is turned
With their stones and big sticks
Come on and follow me into the light

The more you deny it the more that it grows
And I know that your thinking of it
You just won't let it show
Come on and follow me into the light

Let me show you love
My blood is raging now

We've planned it for so long,
I don't understand these doubts that are in your in mind
Thought we were two of a kind?
Come on and follow me into the light

Let me show you love
My blood is raging now
we're high enough if we jump this will end
So take my hand ,  we will have no regrets

[Stylus]

  Ello  B.I.G  DONG.....   I just had a listen to your song & it has great potential I like the guitar & you
play it comfortably so. The song appeals &  the melody needs tweaking ( as it is a good melody) just make the melody flow sweeter & then lyrics will flow neater. Not bad considering its recorded on your i-phone. look forward to much more stuff & this song on completion.
                         Keep on creating         Cheerzz  Bud      Stylus 

[theLostLad]

Good song, great rhythm and energy. The Into The light line is (for me) more catchy than the chorus - maybe this needs a bit of work? The falsetto bit adds some light and shade,but maybe a break somewhere would also add to the dynamics. Good solid start though, nice one.

[Kafla's Evil Twin]

wOW!

Thank you for the great feedback - keep it coming - I need to improve after hearing whats on here 

[Stylus]

Hi Big Noise   You already improved!    Like The Name change      

[Kafla's Evil Twin]

Muchos appreciated Mr Stylus 

[Dogmax]

Wait a minute what's going on here, what is your name, are you Kafla, please don't tell me he has a Evil Twin, you mean theres TWO of you, ah feck this hi, im only on me first can like.

Okay the song, can someone tell me which song i'm listening to, sorry Guys, i have to listen to this again.

Man you got a great voice, don't worry about the guitar, that will fall into place, now can someone please tell me what's going on here, i mean i was calling him Adam earlier.

I need something stronger than a can. 

[Wicked Deeds]

Kafla's Evil Twin - you have the devil in you!  Welcome to the dark side.

Very much a work in progress but it's all here - strong rhythmic guitar with a good selection of interesting chords and a  strong vocal melody.  Looking forward to the produced version to hear how you make use of each section and the hooks that you're sure to introduce. 

Wicked Deeds

[Dutchbeat]

ha, Evil Twin,

sounds very good to me, your vocal is great (alsmost as good as the voice of a guy named Kafla)

i am wondering what kind of arrangment (Instrument / soundwise) you are going to give this, i think these slower parts ("let me show you love" etc.) are great, but seemt to need another arrangment than the fast guitar strumming (in my opinion). And that: "come on and follow me into the light"-line is very beautifal and hooky.

off topic: is this a nice and friendly forum?

[Kafla's Evil Twin]

Wait a minute what's going on here, what is your name, are you Kafla, please don't tell me he has a Evil Twin, you mean theres TWO of you, ah feck this hi, im only on me first can like.

Okay the song, can someone tell me which song i'm listening to, sorry Guys, i have to listen to this again.

Man you got a great voice, don't worry about the guitar, that will fall into place, now can someone please tell me what's going on here, i mean i was calling him Adam earlier.

I need something stronger than a can. 

You make me laugh Pat - call me what you want !

I have had this around for years - I have a 'Led Zepplin' style arrangement going on in my head but as yet haven't cracked how to do this

[Jess]

IS THIS KAFLA?!?!!!! HAS KAFLA COME BACK!?!?!?

[Tester345]

Oh God, I actually love this!

Such energy and great vocals, just needs that "push" from a band, maybe harmonies...
But I really like it

[Dutchbeat]

IS THIS KAFLA?!?!!!! HAS KAFLA COME BACK!?!?!?

Hi Jess, no i think it is Kafla's evil twin 

but great song indeed, and almost as talented as Kaf himself!!!!

[Jess]

IS THIS KAFLA?!?!!!! HAS KAFLA COME BACK!?!?!?

Hi Jess, no i think it is Kafla's evil twin 

but great song indeed, and almost as talented as Kaf himself!!!!

AND ARE YOU DUTCHBEAT?!?!?!

[Dutchbeat]

ah damn, Jess, you got me...how do you do that?

i have to i admit, i am slowly transforming back into Dutchbeat again...
that may be a bad sign, but
i hope that is ok...

so, now where was I....any new mega forum collaboration projects going on out here...

sorry