[habiTat]

Hi guys,

This is an idea I've had for a sequel song to 'Broom-tailed Star'. In bts the primative farmer sees a comet, gets scared and kills himself 'to save his family' as a kind of sacrifice.
http://www.songwriterforum.co.uk/song-reviews/broom-tailed-star-(habitatmichael-collab)/

All a bit weird but anyway, this idea follows on from that ordeal, expressing his regret at running away from his fears. I've written it to be far less literal than all that, it could be interpreted as something far more conventional, ie. a guy leaving his wife and kids, then regretting it.

All feedback greatly appreciated


Pocket full of seeds

Goodbye all the things I know
I'm leaving you behind
Wandering
Far and wide

I sacrificed my soul
Tore myself away from you
Left you all alone
Was that right? I don't know

What's done is done
I'm on the darkest road
Got a pocket full of seeds
And a head full of dreams
What's done is done
I'm sorry I left you though
It seems I always run away
Why? I'll never know

You gave me all I had
A family
But when the times were hard
I ran away

Said I was striving hard
Said that I tried
When really all I did
Was hid and lied

What's done is done
I'm on the darkest road
Got a pocket full of seeds
And a head full of dreams
What's done is done
I'm sorry I left you though
It seems I always run away
Why? I'll never know

Deeply I know that I meant you well
I did what I did with no malice felt
I left you alone and I'm sorry for that
But I started again & I can't go back

What's done is done
I'm on the darkest road
Got a pocket full of seeds
And a head full of dreams
What's done is done
I'm sorry I left you though
It seems I always run away
Why? I'll never know

[S.T.C]

Reading it i tried to conjure up your voice in my head...so i can tell you it works..

As to content...not much you can do in a medieval type setting ...so i think it`s good ..the titles quite good.

[BooBoo]

Good song! Liked the whole thing, can't think of a favourite part!

[benjo]

HEY,

really liked this some really top lines nice  tony...

[Jess]

Firstly, I love how the title isn't 'what's done is done' because when you read it that feels like the main hook in the chorus but I like your title because it made me want to click on this song and to me it creates the right 'vibe' for the song
I like the concept and I like the many ways it can be interpreted. I LOVED the video for your last song, that man on the comet- it was amazing! I hope this has a video to it too

[PeeJay]

I'm having a problem with the story line here.

Always running away from relationships is more of a modern phenomenon and not really something a primitive farmer would do. They tended to stick around and stay 'married' to the same person. That's if you are still talking about the same farmer? Since it's a sequel i assume you are.

This line - 'Was hid and lied' seemed awkward - was hide and lie maybe?

I liked the 'pocket full of seeds' denoting enough to make a new start both in his own life and conecting to his farming livelihood.

Phil.

[habiTat]

I'm having a problem with the story line here.

Always running away from relationships is more of a modern phenomenon and not really something a primitive farmer would do. They tended to stick around and stay 'married' to the same person. That's if you are still talking about the same farmer? Since it's a sequel i assume you are.

This line - 'Was hid and lied' seemed awkward - was hide and lie maybe?

I liked the 'pocket full of seeds' denoting enough to make a new start both in his own life and conecting to his farming livelihood.

Phil.

Cheers for the analysis Phil, I appreciate it.

The way I see it, there have always been cowards, right through history, taking on many forms, that was the angle I approached it from.

'Hid and lied' is intended to rhyme with the line two lines above 'said that I tried'.

Thanks for challenging it though, I really do appreciate the thought you've taken, and yes, the seeds part is intended to have more than one meaning, and it also gives me some great opportunities for the next video.

Cheers

hab..

[seriousfun]

Pocket full of seeds and head full of dreams - really great stuff this John.

It's a nice write and a compelling tale. liked this a lot.

Allan.