[ofgaray]

https://soundcloud.com/oscarfaundez/the-hurricane-shade

lyrics:
 
   when I want everything to be well in the morning
   just the hurricane shade is around
 
   turning my mind to see some good things, oh, but always
   just the hurricane shade is around

Please comment.
 
Regards.

[habiTat]

Hi, welcome to the forum.

Just some advice, the forum guidelines specify that you should introduce yourself (in the introductions section) and then properly introduce your songs, including any background, specific feedback you want and also the lyrics.

We work on the reciprocal basis whereby we all review each others work, without that the forum wouldn't work. Try to review a good few songs when you post yours and whenever you get the time and people will respond and take the time to listen to yours.. if you just say 'please comment' you'll either be ignored or you'll get messages like this, only some might be less diplomatic 

Cheers

hab..

[S.T.C]

Good track!!

[man of simple pleasures]

cool title! its rocking!


come in and join the gang!

[kiltimaghlad]

T rex meets Gary Numan.


This is boss tune. Like it mate.

[flossie]

 Great guitar playing!

[Saeed AlSuri]

Hello Oscar ..

Nice song .. I was waiting for the screaming solo in the middle after the stop .. but there was no solo in the song .. this song really need a solo .. 


Cheers ..

[benjo]

hi there,

great track but I think it needed a solo to or more lyrics in there

maybe,    twisting turning
               destruction hurting
               damage done, damage done
               time to run, slum slum               just an idea

I just wanted to add my 2 cents, good luck with it mate, tony...
               
               

[ofgaray]

hi there,

great track but I think it needed a solo to or more lyrics in there

maybe,    twisting turning
               destruction hurting
               damage done, damage done
               time to run, slum slum               just an idea

I just wanted to add my 2 cents, good luck with it mate, tony...
               
               

Well... the song speaks about when you hope to have a nice day but always there is something that spoils it. Not about a hurricane as a natural phenomenon

[Neil C]

Hi, great title and good bit of powerful rock, tight with real energy.

Neil

[ofgaray]

Hi, great title and good bit of powerful rock, tight with real energy.

Neil

Thank you

[dinnerwithgreedo]

I loved this and have downloaded it too. Solo's are over-rated

[ofgaray]

I loved this and have downloaded it too. Solo's are over-rated

thanx... it's truth about solos.

regards

[adamholden]

hi

I like the music a lot and the idea is strong. But the lyrics let it down or at least I can't relate to the detail. I love the sound of the hu/who ricae ... shade ... is around. Very cool. Are you aiming for something close to regular speech (which the first line suggests) or are you aiming at something else?

A few words seems odd (well; why not alright or okay ... or feel well or feel good) ... and the rhythm of the second verse words doesn't work particularly well.

It's good stuff though. You don't need a solo, nor a bridge, but it does need the elements to be stronger.

Cheers
Adam