[Alan Starkie]

It's been a while but I've managed to finally get back into writing and recording after moving house and job.

This little song has been floating around for a few weeks.

It's unfinished but you can get what I'm aiming for hopefully.

Thanks for any comments.

https://soundcloud.com/alanstarkie/summer-clothes_rough-idea/s-XvpnO


Summer Clothes

Summer sun, where did you go
We've been looking so long
Only coming out when the winter's gone

Come and play with the world again
Show us how to be free
Chase away the night so that we can see

Say you'll be the one to take us home

Don't put your summer clothes back in the closet
Cos summer's not over yet
Don't put your summer clothes back in the closet
Cos summer's not over yet

I don't need to make you see
What you mean to me
When I can sit right down and take in the morning breeze

Holding down another day
Keeping up the pace
You're the only friend I need when you warm my face

Taking care of the children as they play

CHORUS

When I'm lost in myself
I can look for a light
Take the colours away
Even then I can see why we look to the sky

SOLO

CHORUS/OUTRO

[Neil C]

Alan, delighted you're back.
Nice tune, I liked the minor chording which i felt made it sound slight autumnal if that makes sense..
I think I'd develop the synth/string arrangement.
Unfinished? Yet I know it'll only get getter

Neil

[Dave Bradley]

Nice little tune. I reckon if it were a bit punchier on the beat it would make it stronger as a pop style, it's loose and laid back as it stands, which is fine, more small-town country than indie pop-rock. Nice though.

I like the rough concept, it's like a smallscale Mr Blue Sky in terms of its message...but..."in the closet", is that a deliberate lateral allusion? If not, then seems a bit weird, closet is a mundane word except in the context of either being "in one" or finding a skeleton there...isn't it?

[montydog]

Hmmm....man, you can sing! Great as it is so far - definitely worth pursuing with more lyrics and maybe an instrumental break. It's a very catchy, strong melody. Lovely, clean, smooth and classy production - like the audio equivalent of a magnum on a summer day.

[Alan Starkie]

Alan, delighted you're back.
Nice tune, I liked the minor chording which i felt made it sound slight autumnal if that makes sense..
I think I'd develop the synth/string arrangement.
Unfinished? Yet I know it'll only get getter

Neil

Thanks Neil. Nice to be back. Autumnal.. yeah I can definitely see that.

Nice little tune. I reckon if it were a bit punchier on the beat it would make it stronger as a pop style, it's loose and laid back as it stands, which is fine, more small-town country than indie pop-rock. Nice though.

I like the rough concept, it's like a smallscale Mr Blue Sky in terms of its message...but..."in the closet", is that a deliberate lateral allusion? If not, then seems a bit weird, closet is a mundane word except in the context of either being "in one" or finding a skeleton there...isn't it?

Cheers. 'is that a deliberate lateral allusion?' - I have no idea! lol

It was always 'closet' in my head. 'Wardrobe' is like a mouthful of marbles.

Hmmm....man, you can sing! Great as it is so far - definitely worth pursuing with more lyrics and maybe an instrumental break. It's a very catchy, strong melody. Lovely, clean, smooth and classy production - like the audio equivalent of a magnum on a summer day.

Ha!!! What a description... I love it.

Thanks Monty. I'm going to implement near enough everything mentioned.

[S.T.C]

links down

[Alan Starkie]

links down

Sorted.

[Dave Bradley]

Yeah, cupboard would also probably not work...although potential for cupboard love...

[Dutchbeat]

link doesn't work for me at the moment

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i will get back

[Alan Starkie]

Sorry guys - link sorted.

[kiltimaghlad]

Like his Alan,

You have a voice thats at the higher register and it works really well here. Good chorus. ;-)

[flossie]

Yup this is a good un and a keeper!

So I think I'd develop the lyrics of the chorus, you maybe need a couple of new lines, otherwise it's just a little bit too repetitive.

Perfect lyrically for an ad methinks!!!! You're well on the way with this one, I reckon a little instrumental break, with some sort of 'summer sun' lyric chanting away (with multi-layered vocals) and it's done!
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[Alan Starkie]

Thanks kiltimaghlad and flossie

Middle eight and solo added...

[S.T.C]

Heard it now,,tbh not your best work,,it`s got your signature,,but found it to be a re-hash in a way...you choose simple lyrics and themes..ok but this is cliche laden ,and for me doesn`t appeal........but it saying that your target audience might love it,,,so what do i know,,,,,,,the elecy guitar picks it up a bit.....so all in all it`s light ,bright and catchy...could be something off Freinds  ?

[flossie]

Yes m8 and instrumental have it sorted now 

At 2:57 you have a 't' vocal sound/hi hat - I know this isn't finished but just in case you don't spot it.

Good luck with it
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