This is a really good lyric, I especially like the irony in that the only thing he got was the suit and then he had to pay for that anyway. Is there any particular reason why you made the judge a woman? I think it could be a little clearer for listeners if the judge was a man, it is correct as it is but means using the word she when referring to the third person in the plot sandwiched between lines talking about the wife so some may get confused if they are not listening close enough. It's a small inconsequential change and while it may not make much difference it certainly wouldn't hurt
I did like shiny's suggestion of cutting out or changing the suit billing line, just sounds cumbersome, but maybe you could introduce the purchase of a nice new suit earlier in the plot, v2 or v3, then it would have the added benefit if supporting the hook line and providing anothway to set it up. Maybe replace the house and kids line as you reveal that in the chorus, sort of.
These are both pretty minor suggestions, cause its a real well written piece but just a thought, a wife going out every night, getting into drunken fights and leaving the kids at home with hubby, does that happen? Things must have gone downhill since I got married. Think about the validity of that situation, you know your audience better than I so if its relevant then run with it, if not.......
Cheers
Allan
