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Neil C:
Here's v2 https://soundcloud.com/neilconnor-2/little-gameshow-master-11-june updated based on feedback.

Here's some very early recording of joint work between Kayles, Grimbo and myself which I cobbled together this morning, and could really doing with some initial feedback on the song.

Its a 70's style piano ballad, I'm thinking Elton/ Without You/Adele.

https://soundcloud.com/neilconnor-2/al-the-game-demo-may-2013

Specifically what do you think of the tune: its structure, lyrics, melody etc. please don't worry about the performance or production - there isn't any, suggestions around arrangement would be good too.
Oh and lastly what do you think it should be titled?

Thanks in anticipation
:)
Neil

Dutchbeat:
the chords ans song are very ok

a song that is seriously nice, but the arrangment for some reason kept me wonder

but it is all there

YES! towards the end, that really is the feelin

Kayles86:
Sounding good neil

Sing4me88:
Liking the chords and melody. Certainly has that early Elton feel to it. IMO powerful female vocals could ignite this into a power ballad type song. Great work and seems to be a great foundation to build to completion on :)

montydog:
You have recorded your vocals beautifully - they really spring out of my speakers. This takes a few listens before it starts to come together. It's a grower, not an instant catchy tune. Subtle and laid back. It reminded me of Carol King rather than Elton John. I think you need to keep the arrangement/instrumentation in just a supportive role as you have with this demo - let the song speak for itself. I would prefer a lusher strings effect rather than the rather harsh synth sound you've gone for here. It's classy stuff, Neil.

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