[HappyBastard]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eyBZC5NbvtM&feature=youtu.be

For all intensive purposes, this song is pretty much finished.  However, I kept it out of the other section as it's not finished in the sense that it's just a video recording and doesn't have any other instruments and so on.  It's basically a demo I'd use to show the basic core of the song.
This song is basically a mission statement regarding writing and its importance to both me and mankind.  I guess it's supposed to promote free thinking and all that stuff.  I'm not sure, take what you will from it.
Also, for the record, I don't credit myself in ANY way as a singer.  Lyricist and guitarist maybe but that's it so bare with me on the vocals front.  All feedback will be most welcome and appreciated.

Lyrics:
Many years before I wrote this song
There was a concept that seemed quite absurd
At first a seldom few chose to play along
And they could some things of which we'd never heard

They found constellations in our words
And they could draw a map depicting nouns and verbs
And each and ever man on Earth
Could become immortal should the skills be yearned

So as millenia came to pass
The greatest writers left their mark
And Homer, Tolstoy, and even Monty Python
Sanctioned wisdom as a form of art

But it's easy to list and exemplify
So I'm standing here trying to emphasise
That we all have pages in our minds
And we all have hopes we come to realise

And it's true we could just justify
Our ways of life by citing quips
And soliloquies that we've come across
scouring scripts for any hints or tips

But aren't we all just playwrights in the end?
Aren't we all just playwrights in the end?
Aren't we all just playwrights splitting quills

Staining ink to our shaking hands
And scratching our beards for what must be the thousandth time
On a holy quest trying to find the perfect words
TO bring these pages back to life

So I'm not quitting yet, I'm just taking a moment
To remind my self that this isn't fucking Shakespeare
There is no reading between the lines,
At best some half-arsed cliche lines
That I'm pretty are irrelevant in the end

So when my ink runs dry
Then it's time to die
And only then
Will I have nothing left to write.

[terrysains]

Great words, (except one) and I think you should try to highlight them more as the guitar wipes them a bit. Maybe a softer play to highlight them?
Although I disagree that we are all playrights, just like we are all not Olympians only the chosen few and it looks like you are one of them. Well done. Terry Sains

[Neil C]

Confidently done for a live recording which bounces along nicely.
Good chord changes and melody.
Singing seems fine to me.
Look forward to hearing completed production.

Neil

[S.T.C]

Sort that chest of draws out ,,,was doing my head in

I agree with Neil c ,i guess......`i`m amazed you can remember so many words like that..i need em almost pinned to my nose...just can`t retain written words in my head..not even songs iv`e been listening to for years.

Liked it though...

[Dutchbeat]

i agree, it is very cool, Happy Bastard, it is really good
but, i want would like to notice in a polite way, that when you show up on this forum, once in a while

to put something on the forum of YOU, and comment on your song, and talk about that

the number of posts from you about someone else's song, lyrics or efforts....is relatively low.
very low

you are very welcome to this forum if you are willing to interact, but this is not ok  

ok?  

[HappyBastard]

i agree, it is very cool, Happy Bastard, it is really good
but, i want would like to notice in a polite way, that when you show up on this forum, once in a while

to put something on the forum of YOU, and comment on your song, and talk about that

the number of posts from you about someone else's song, lyrics or efforts....is relatively low.
very low

you are very welcome to this forum if you are willing to interact, but this is not ok  

ok?  

I'm all too aware and it's very unfair and something that makes me feel very guilty.  I have a tendency to listen to a lot of the music and not write anything - which is obviously pretty useless to everyone when they don't even know that I've listened. I don't know why, a lot of the time I just have very little confidence in my own opinion so maybe that's it.  Still no excuse so thanks for calling me on it and I will try to write more and be more assertive.

[crystalsuzy]

WOW! Very impressive lyrics and very well delivered, except that if I hadn't had the lyrics in front of me, I wouldn't have caught them all, and that would be a shame...I don't know how you can rectify this but I would try...you are very young and I think you have some obvious talent...please son't feel unsure of yourself when it comes to posting reviews on other peoples songs...even if you just say how effects you in general or find one thing you really like about it or don't like and why...it doesn't have to be anything detailed...keep working on this one...thanks for this share

[Alan Starkie]

You're a good writer Mr. Bastard.

This is like a song you'd hear from a resident artist on a TV show at 12.30am.

Intelligently written. I'd say lose a few words to take a breath but they all play a valuable part in the song!

Alan.