Hey guys,
Got a rough work in progress. I don't have my fancy guy vocals or production, just my raw vocals and my own garageband outline. It's worth risking feedback so I can polish the song before I hand it over to the pros. Keen to hear your thoughts on melody, what kind of production would suit - what needs sorting out. I know I need to work out better intros, bridge and outro.
Thanks again.
The song is about the moon and a lake, as an analogy for unrequited love - and the desire for intimacy.
https://soundcloud.com/michelleapatrick/lake-eileen-1Lake Eileen
I sit a while with Lake Eileen,
on ground that is uneven.
Yet who could contain my Eileen,
and still remain even.
She knows how to be,
alone with her dreams.
The silence never ends,
and her surface never breaks.
Not even for me, not even for me.
I dream she washes over me,
she struggles free and comes to me.
While the city streets are sleeping,
it's my company she seeks.
Who knows what she sees,
alone with her dreams.
The silence never ends,
and her surface never breaks.
Not even for me, not even for me
Under the dark sky, I am mesmerized.
Under the moonlight my love rests tonight.
In my embrace, in my embrace.