[S.T.C]

Ok.so here we have something else..not to be taken to seriously..but it`s listenable ..

https://soundcloud.com/songsthatcry/these-days

Hmm ..sort of about the vibe..Nivarnaish ....

Wrote today,recorded today...i`m supposed to be getting on with something for Flossie..which i will .

Lyrics..bit cliche i admit...but theres only so many words in the universe.

i have no .........doubt ...................these days

theres a lot  of it...... ,about............ these days

easy plays........ and ........................them lazy ways

a gold cup........ on a....................... silver tray.


i have no......... doubt...................... these days

there`s a lot of it...,about ...............these days

a copper sun...... melting ................in the haze

black diamond shades ......................blocking out the rays

Try as i might
i can`t see to  the light

try as i must
i can`t see through the dust

these days

C-A-R-O-L-I-N-A (TRYING OUT THE FALSETTO}

[jmacdon]

I love the live recording - guitar / vocal is perfect !

Mind you, I'd probably swap the phrase "no..........doubt" for "herpes" and you'll probably have a hit !!

[Neil C]

Hi I can hear the Nivarna thing, words kind of suit it.
I think I'd be a bit clearer about the structure and variation of the chords/melody, which you do later on, to stop it meandering regardless as to whether it going to be pumped up rock or laid back.
Wasn't expecting that end part though as I was on Soundlcoud
Neil

[S.T.C]

I started off wrong and just kept it going...i`m off today ,so will try and do a better copy..and omit the ending.

[montydog]

Some tuning issues on the vocal but otherwise this is rather lovely, particularly the guitar playing which is gorgeous. I like the format and the laid back approach. The melody could just do with clarifying a little. I think I can tell that you're not comfortable singing yet. I think the lyrics are great - simple, direct and effective.

[S.T.C]

Some tuning issues on the vocal but otherwise this is rather lovely, particularly the guitar playing which is gorgeous. I like the format and the laid back approach. The melody could just do with clarifying a little. I think I can tell that you're not comfortable singing yet. I think the lyrics are great - simple, direct and effective.

Cheers for the guitar comments..when i press record i tend to freeze up and started the guitar all wrong...the first 2 lines i sung, i think sound good,if i could only have kept that up.

Did try a bit today but gave up..i have Friday free ,so might have  another go...

I wanted it to be  a stripped down, minimalist  sound with a trace of menace..

The melody does need clarifying i agree, again i started playing chords i didn`t intend too.....

The lyrics..well , i didn`t impress myself that much...but maybe there about right.

[habiTat]

Hey STC, the guitar sounds really nice, lovely and warm. Your vocal is getting better as well, it's like you're getting more confident.

I reckon just familiarise yourself with it more, then re-record.

hab..

[Dutchbeat]

very, very ok

reminds me of the Doors,

adding a few long organ notes would work, i think

but cool, yes

[flossie]

I agree with Dutchbeat, some doorsy organ sounds and maybe further along a brush kit playing with lots of reverb and this would add a drug induced mellowness to this piece. 

I think this is definitely worth developing I'm looking forward to hearing the next version!
x

[Kafla]

Hey STC

You are definitely improving - the guitar is as well played as I have heard from you and the vocal is more prominent and confident

Signs that you are making huge strides