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ShinyThang:
This burst out of me on Sunday morning and I couldn't wait to post it here for comment. It's a work in progress so, there's a big hole where I'm gonna put a lead break.

https://soundcloud.com/geoffjamesevans/nowhere-to-go

Nowhere to Go
copyright Geoffrey James Evans 2013. All rights reserved

I've got the sun in my eye and I'm going away
I've got nowhere to go but I'm leaving today
No use sitting on my hands      
I don't care   you don't understand

(chorus)
I've just gotta be on the road in the summer time
Gotta be doin' my own thing in my own time
I ain't got any work to do
Just need a town to be passing through on my way


Got the beach in my sights and the radio high
I guess I look pretty cool as I'm passing you by
Got my eye out along the side
For a lady to share the ride

Chorus

(Mid 8 )
I'm not leaving a forwarding address
'Cos I really didn't leave anything behind

Chorus


... I'll do some reviews later in the week, promise ;)

habiTat:
You did this in a morning!!!?  :o

Bloody excellent!!

It reminds me a bit of Breakfast at Tiffanys by Deep Blue Something, that combined with the general style of The Divine Comedy. I love it, very accomplished, well written, well arranged and very summery.  ;D

Sorry I can't offer anything constructive, to me it sounds finished.

Thanks for sharing

Hab..

Binladeda:
Very nice  ;D....The sun is streaming through my window, and I'm listening to this.  It has inspired me to have my breakfast in the garden, and enter the comp. ;D ;D...Thanks

Neil C:
Really good song, with a positively sunny melody. Suits your voice too.
Just wonder about 'lady' - perhaps 'you' would be better..
A bit of base and a lead break and you're there.
:)
Neil   

ShinyThang:
Ha ha! Thanks Habitat. This one was such a blast to do. Not exactly in a morning but 80% of it was there within a couple of hours. The middle 8 (or middle 4 to be more accurate!) came last and it is my fav bit. It was a real treat tonight driving out of the office car park in the sunshine with the windows down and this on the player.

Binladeda. Many thanks and I am glad if I helped to motivate you in any way :)

Neil C. Thanks for the kind words. I agree about the 'lady' line. Seems a bit sleezy now I look at it again. I will have another look at the entire lyric before i finalise. I've also got a bass line promised by Basshead but he doesn't know that our old drummer wants to 'tweek' the drums ;). Then the pressure will be on me to slot in a killer lead break (I wish) ... Perhaps we should re-form the band?

P.s. Neil, no idea who's Saab that is ... not mine :( just a randon snap I took in Margate (I think) in about 1981! ... good lord how old am I?

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