10 Days of Creation

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Chris_lightless

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« on: April 17, 2013, 10:00:38 AM »
I wrote this a few years ago... barely touched it so far... it was kinda the start of this whole i am writing lyric issue... anyway... i just want to post the first thing i ever came up with ...
advice and feedback  would be nice... cheers chris

...10 days of creation...
( Verse 1 )
Every day, I  wear my rosario
I dont  believe in higher ups
But why do i start believing
You ain´t outta this world
Oh Almighty what did you do
I would pilgrim all the way

( Pre chorus 1 )
You are an angel with brace and glasses
even with, way too gorgeous
Ohu, you just make me speechless

( Chorus  )
I thought, God took seven days
Fair skin,  i want to caress sin
Blond hair,i want to botch sin
Blue eyes, i want to see sin
Plush  lips, i want to kiss sin
Sweet scent, i want to smell sin
Graceful appearance, i want to fancy sin
Tiny nose, i want to nose sin
Gummy smile, i want to watch sin
Scars ( below your lip), i want to wear sin
Humble nature, i want to witness sin
Yehay, God took ten days to make yohu

(Verse 2 )
Every day, I read in my  books
I dont  read the holy Bible
But why do i start praying
You would be all i ever need
I would attend church all day long
Oh be my Eve
We dont have to believe
She was the first Sinner, relieve

( Pre chorus 2 )
You are an angel with brace and glasses
even with, way too gorgeous
Ohu, you just make me motionless

( Chorus  )
I thought God took seven days
Fair skin,  i want to caress, sin
Blond hair,i want to botch, sin
Blue eyes, i want to see, sin
Plush  lips, i want to kiss, sin
Sweet scent, i want to smell ,sin
Graceful appearance, i want to fancy, sin
Tiny nose, i want to nose, sin
Gummy smile, i want to watch, sin
Scars ( below your lip), i want to wear, sin
Humble nature, i want to witness, sin
Yehay, God took ten days to make yohu

(Verse 3)
I am not God nor a titan
I am not a demigod nor  divine
I cant compete, just the sixth day
But my  feelings are  sacred
So dont deceive
What could be your holy ground
Because i fall for ya,my angel
So take me under your wings

( Pre chorus 3)
You are an angel with brace and glasses
Even with, way too gorgeous
Ohu, you just make me breathless

(Final  chrous )
Oh Heaven or Hell , saint or sinner
God could force me to hell
I would come back,
want to see your eyes
God could force me to face Lucifer
I would come back
want to touch your face
God could make me a sinner
I wouldnt care
want to kiss your lips
Gates of Hell cant hold me off
Cause´  everything I want to be
Is  Adam, your Adam
Yehay, God took ten days to make yohu
Ten days
Yehay Ohu "Let there be an Angel"



« Last Edit: April 17, 2013, 05:19:48 PM by Chris_lightless »
pure hearts are meant to bleed

teprometo13

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« Reply #1 on: April 17, 2013, 01:44:57 PM »
This is a good song - what genre were you thinking of? Or do you have no idea? :)
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Chris_lightless

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« Reply #2 on: April 17, 2013, 03:27:30 PM »
Hey, thanks
back there it was pop^^
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« Reply #3 on: April 17, 2013, 03:30:22 PM »
And on the SEVENTH day he rested ;)

i will have a look at then tomorrow..

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« Reply #4 on: April 17, 2013, 04:06:18 PM »
This is quite good, but I do prefer some of the other songs that you've posted on the forum- which i guess is good right because it means you've improved, however i still like the originality of the theme and the way its excecuted. My favourite bit's the second verse, also like the pre-choruses (especially the first one).
"When writing a song, if your afraid to suck, you'll never write a note" -Jeff Boyle