[prideandjoy]

This is something I wrote last year during a rough patch.......I know the chorus may be too long...was going for an old skool slow rnb not like the stuff today....tell me what you think?

Knock knock

(Intro)
I have a question for y’all….is karma real?....Because I can’t stop thinking about the women I have wronged.

(Chorus)
Knocking on my door
It keeps knocking on my door
I’ve been thinking about them
All these women
I deceived so many
I toyed with so many
Now I’m paying the price
Roll the dice
Multiply by ten
Because I’m telling you
Karma is ten times worse
I wish I’d put her first

The bad deeds I’ve done
I’m now counting them
One by one
I’m sorry I can’t concentrate
You see, she left me
I was finally so happy
No more creeping, no more lying
No more pretending to be caring

I used to drive around in my flash car
I used to tell each woman she was a star
I would pick out a new designer suit
Little did she know it was her heart
I’m about to loot

I dined in the classiest restaurant
I had the best women on my arm
Each one would ring the alarm
I would then leave them
To find another woman

I would count down the dates
Wait until she was ready to give it up
Once she did that was my time up
I was a predator at my best
I was never a man to rest

Knocking on my door
It keeps knocking on my door
I’ve been thinking about them
All these women
I deceived so many
I toyed with so many
Now I’m paying the price
Roll the dice
Multiply by ten
Because I’m telling you
Karma is ten times worse
I wish I’d put her first

I was always bedding a new one
It was always about me and my needs
I just didn’t think I’d be counting my deeds
How many women I would chase
I didn’t know it was something I’d face

I’m sitting alone thinking about them
I think about all these different women
I used to break hearts like plates
I was smashing down these plates
I never cared about them
I just cared to have them

Each women was a warning sign
They were showing me my crime
Now the one I love and care about
She heard me talking and found out
She caught me flirting with an old one
You see….I wasn’t exactly done

Knocking on my door
It keeps knocking on my door
I’ve been thinking about them
All these women
I deceived so many
I toyed with so many
Now I’m paying the price
Roll the dice
Multiply by ten
Because I’m telling you
Karma is ten times worse
I wish I’d put her first
I’m begging baby…don’t go….I need you…I’m sorry

[terrysains]

I really enjoyed reading this, it is a very interesting story, I think more could be done by adding  feelings to the actions, so people could empathise more with the singer, very well written indeed.  Well done.  Terry Sains.

[prideandjoy]

Hey, Thanks for commenting.
The songs not about feelings- it's literally about a player with a cold heart where theres no guilt until shit hits the fan and he thinks back to every single one hence its more action related...the dos than still completely wanting to come to terms with what he's realised

[teprometo13]

I don't know of many songs like this, but I really enjoyed it.
I especially liked the "karma is ten times worse."

Good work

[prideandjoy]

Thanks...

I like writing differently but also where these experiences are felt by millions of people all the time