[BooBoo]

Please tell me what you think of this.

Crazy Life

Verse
Just another teenage girl,
Living in a big ol' city,
Working on a dream,
But she won't tell nobody,
While she's hoping,
Heartache is worlds away,
She's still stuck in school,
So it could happen any day,

Pre chorus
She's stays out of view,
While everyone wants to be on top,
Hugs her notebook and pen,
'Cause lyrics are all she's got

Chorus
Welcome to her crazy life,
Where everything is upside down,
And everybody is racing for,
The popularity crown

Verse
The girl leaves school with,
A notebook and guitar,
Playing in bars all night,
To make her dreams go far,
One day she move to America,
To make that dream come true,
But when she gets there,
Everything's still like high school,

Pre chorus
She stays out of view,
While everyone wants to be on top,
Hugs her notebook and pen,
'Cause lyrics  all she's got

Chorus
Welcome to her crazy life,
Where everything is upside down,
And everybody is racing for,
The popularity crown,

Bridge
This teenage girl,
Now a woman of 25,
Her dreams haven't come true,
But they're still alive

Pre chorus
No matter where she goes,
Everyone wants to be on top,
Now she hugs her children close,
'Cause they're the best things she's got

Chorus
Welcome to her crazy life,
Where everything is upside down,
And everybody is racing for,
The popularity crown,
She no longer cares though,
As she settles down

[teprometo13]

This is a great song - really relatable - but maybe the chorus could be a bit longer for more depth?

[Jess]

Ohmygosh. This is the most relatable thing I have ever read or this forum! (Except from the last bit about kids..I'm not quite there) But, seriously, this song is so stunning and honest, with such an amazing viewpoint of a relatable topic. I love the story in it too, my favourite bit's the pre-chorus and the last lines of the chorus, but I mean the whole thing is superb. Love it. Love it. Love it.

[S.T.C]

I read them and thought,hmm,don`t think this works...then i sung it,and it rhymes quite nicely...story is ok also.....the more you stay away from themes to do with relationships breaking up..the more you will be forced to write newer more interesting themes?

[Missseventeen]

This is such a relatable song I think everyone on here can link with it some way!! Great job, you've got such an amazing talent! I love reading this I would love to hear it finished aswell, this reminded me of Taylor swift in her early years when she actually cared what she wrote about ahaha!
Keep the amazing work up
Best wishes miss seventeen

[BooBoo]

Whoa loving the reviews haha

Teprometo13 - I might see of I can extend the chorus on a way that I think works but I made it shorter than I normally do for the more short but sweet effect. It's one of the shorter chorus I've done on a song and was more like an experiment but ill take that in!

Jess - I'm so happy you like and able to relate to it (minus the children part). It was sorta the aim to see if could make it relatable. I'm just really happy about how much you like it. In the end I like to write songs to see if I can make people smile or something!

Songsthatcry - I've slowly started writing more songs away from relationships, reaching out into other topics. I think I tend to fall back in the relationship topic because its easier to write about? But I  going to try and 'stay away' from that topic as much as I can and see what I can do. I'm glad you think it rhymes nicely though :3

Missseventeen - im glad you find it relatable as well. I haven't got an amazing talent that I would say but thank you so much for saying that! I think the last thing I listened to before writing this was Taylor, I get a lot of inspiration from her. She's one of my favourite artists and I think she still cares about her music, just heading down a different path for now it's also not the first time I've been compared to Miss Swift though which I like haha

Thanks for the comments

[Sing4me88]

Hey Boo this is another great piece. Again I've picked up a Taylor Swift vibe from reading the lyrics. I'd really love to hear this one, even if just vocals and guitar!

I don't really think the chorus needs lengthened. Yes it's short but it also flows really well and extending it would break the momentum IMO. I think if you can get a really catchy melody to the chorus a short snappy chorus will work wonders. If you are going to extend I'd go for some simple repetition even just 'Crown, crown, crown' to give the chorus a real hook and catch. It's your song of course but that's just my dollars worth!!

A great piece as always

[BooBoo]

Sing4me88 thanks for your comments. I haven't extended it at all at the moment and im not to sure if I will. Mainly out of laziness. But thanks for the advice of what I could do if I were going to extend!

[terrysains]

I think you have empathised with 99.9% of the population with these lyrics, male amd female.
Would have liked a more 'happy, content, but still dreaming' for an ending, just my humble, I will look forward to hearing it, if your not feeling too lazy of course!! good luck. Terry Sains.