[teprometo13]

I wrote this song a couple of days ago and it isn't based on anyone, so let me know what you think,
(Verse 1)
Up again like the past couple of weeks,
And I just wanna go to bed,
Broken hearts with every word said,
I wish I could see inside your head,
It's the same old same old tonight,
We'll be alright at the morning light,
6AM and the flowing teadrops fall into the empty ice cream tub,
(chorus)
I still feel my heart break,
I still feel the walls shake,
I can sense the storm now,
Your words are ringing loud at,
1:22am, 1:22am,
Why don't you just come back?
Take a look at the facts,
Why are you so perfect?
Why am I not worth it?
1:22am, 1:22am,
(Verse 2)
Remember visiting Highclere Castle,
Just like the calm before the fall,
You promised that someday I would be the one,
To say I do to you,
Your lights were shining bright that night,
Funny how quickly these things fade,
No fights but endless compliments,
Funny how quickly these things change,
(chorus)

(bridge)
Now I'll listen to Taylor Swift on my own,
Dance to All Too Well all alone,
Watch the bleak cloud take over my soul,
I never knew July could be this cold,
I watch the roses you gave me slowly die,
Kinda like each letter of your lies,
Then I realise that there's no bullying now,
Gotta scream out loud, will I get through this somehow?

(after bridge)

I still feel my heart break,
I still feel the walls shake,
I can sense the storm now,
Your words are ringing loud at,
1:22am, 1:22am,
I still feel my heart break,
I still feel the walls shake,
I can sense the storm now,
Your words are ringing loud at,
1:22am, 1:22am,
Why don't you just come back?
Take a look at the facts,
Why are you so perfect?
Why am I not worth it?
1:22am, 1:22am,

[BooBoo]

Not a bad song. The bridge was my favourite part and I think that was the strongest part of the song. I love the line about July being cold. That stood out to me.

[Jess]

Firstly, it's such a coincidence, I reference Taylor Swift in a few of my songs too (isn't she amazing!?) Anyway, back to your song, I really like the chorus and I love the bridge- it really sounds like something Taylor could've written, with the whole July thing (like Boo said) and roses and letters, it's really the strongest bit of the song. Onto the verses...I like verse 2 but I'm not really sold on verse 1. One thing you'll notice about me, from my comments on other people's songs is, I really hate cheesy rhymes(!) so the whole 'said' and 'head' rhyme thing, y'know I just think there are better words like instead, ahead, fled, led, etc. but, that said, I do think this is a great piece and I'm in love with that bridge

[teprometo13]

Thanks Booboo :]

Yes, she is amazing, haha! Thank you for saying Taylor could've written it

Thanks for the part on verse 1 - I'll have a think through :]