Hi , thanks for your advice , i am actually reworking some of the lines okay to be totally honest a lot of lines right now .I had literally the same idea. But some lines are kinda hard because i don´t wanna lose that feeling i had when i wrote the song for instance "dying is just another phrase, the reaper took me long ago" i changed it to "I am dying inside, reapers presence already at my side." ...
melody-wise at the very beginning i had a melody but i kinda just listened to trading yesterday and wrote on, changed the lyrics a few times so i am still working on the melody ,i like some pace change , tho.