[tgladwin92]

Hi all, my name is Tom and I'm new to all this.
I would love to hear constructive feedback from people about my first lyrics.

FAR AWAY

I sing my soul to sleep
And my dreams
They follow me

I lose myself within
And my mind
Wonders away

I can take you
I will take you

Far away

I walk along the beach
As the tide
Washes away

My thoughts cast out to sea
And the scent
Takes over me

I can take you
I will take you

Far away

[BooBoo]

This is a good write Tom and to say you are new to this it's really good.

[S.T.C]

Needs to be more of it .........but it`s ok.

[tgladwin92]

@booboo Thank you for the feedback.. I like reading lyrics of my favourite songs and thought I'd have a try at writing some of my own

@songsthatcry Thanks for the feedback.. I do have a bridge but I preferred it short and sweet as it is

 

[FustigateMusic]

Well done man.

I like the power in the simplicity. I'm terrible at getting that to work myself.

What sort of style of music where you thinking it would be as you wrote it though?
Because I think it would fit with just about anything.

It would even make a pretty sweet metal song lol

[The Corsair]

It's good. Enough said.