[Reece!]

O U R K I S S
(it went like this)

over in a flash, no time to think
then we left in a sort of dash
not think 'bout the aftermath
how would we every carry on
didn't even think of the consequences
woah oh now i'm starting to think
that I really, really love you
and I don't know what to do

(chorus)
I remember the kiss, the kiss, our kiss
and it went a little like this
It went all so fast
i really wish it could last
couple seconds of bliss
and that was our kiss (the kiss)
It was all just like that

everyone stared
I tried to be aware
thought we would get somewhere
but to you it was only a kiss
either take it or you miss
woah oh now i'm starting to think
that I really, really love you
and I don't know what to do

(chorus)
I remember the kiss, the kiss, our kiss
and it went a little like this
It went all so fast
i really wish it could last
couple seconds of bliss
and that was our kiss (the kiss)
It was all just like that

I remember the kiss
the kiss yeah our kiss
blow me another kiss
this time lets make it last
Lets do it all over again
but this time we get somewhere
even if it was a dare
but I think i've fallen for you
I remember the kiss, our kiss
so baby blow me another kiss

(chorus)
I remember the kiss, the kiss, our kiss
and it went a little like this
It went all so fast
i really wish it could last
couple seconds of bliss
I just wonna go back
and relive it again (lets do it again)
and that was our kiss (the kiss)
It was all just like that
the kiss (5x) our kiss

[Kayles86]

A good effort reece. From how ive read it i have a sort of R&B sound in the head for the lyrics maybe im wrong? none the less a good try mate

[BooBoo]

Hmmm motto sure on this one if I'm brutely honest. Lyrically i think it's a bit weak but hey I'm just some random person on the Internet. But yeah, lyrically it could be thronged and there doesn't really seem to be a rhyming sequence. I'll admit sometimes I don't keep up with the same amount of rhymes but I think when you look at someone else's work is easier to point out.

Also the title reminds me of that song that goes "my first kiss went a little like this" I can't remember who songs that and the title but maybe change that a little? But remember its your song so do what you feel is right.

I don't think it's a bad song but with a bit more work it could definatly become better. I imagine it to be a fun upbeat song. I also like the way you say "it all went so fast, I wish it could last" I think that's a good part of the song.

In the end it is your song and you should do what you feel is best. We can only give you ways that we think could improve but I also think that ends up being what we like in songs hehe. I hope all this helps you I'm writing in the future as well.

- Bethany