[S.T.C]

Not written a poem in a while......
It`s about,although i didn`t intend it to be..someone caught up in the downward spiral of heroin addiction., having surrendered to the power of the drug, and it`s consequences.



In the soft decay, of a sinking sand
i refused the help, of another's hand
they said they`ed take ,my sins away
but i need them ,for just this day...

i must confirm who i really am
do i deserve, the fate, of all the damned
it makes no matter ,nor any sorrow
it`s my soul, at least ,until tomorrow.

so i sink ,in this soft decay
of never ending, party play
i wish the needle ,sharper be
and pull me in it`s apathy ....

what was now, is now then
leave me sleep in my foxes den
and take my sins,if you must
they lie here with me ,in the dust.

[paulmclay]

Beautiful. It has a great title, and that's what drew me in before knowing what it's about. You've taken a very serious and damning subject and made something very pretty.

[S.T.C]

Thanks Paul...i had a little go at making in to a song......i think it can,but decided it was poem worthy....i show poems on a poetry forum,to get some informed opinions...because i don`t understand what poetry really is..it`s a mystery to me...i guess it`s supposed to stop you in your tracks and make you think??

[locka]

I'm no expert but any means but I love songs which evoke emotion and I think this has loads.  Well done!

[BreathingMusic]

This is brilliant! It's a little bit haunting to be honest. It all just sounds so real but it's written beautifully.

[BooBoo]

This is really good. To take a topic like this and make it into something beautiful is an amazing thing to be able to do!

[Innominate]

Although the use of commas seems often out of place, I read this poem aloud quite a few times and liked it more each time. It has a certain "The Raven" quality to the rhythm and it does what is often very difficult to do, it expresses a complex thing very simply. I think it might benefit from some extra attention but if I had to read out something you wrote, I would very eagerly read this. In fact, I saved a copy of this. Top notch work.