[paulmclay]

I got the idea for this song from those stories of mindless violence you hear or read about all too often.

The call went out for the blood of the boy
And gave chase down the alleyway
For the gentle, sombre kid in black
This was not going to be his day
Incident on Church Street

Now he runs, with tear-filled eyes
And wonders what he did to offend
This brutal band
Of furious hands
And hope this night won't be the end
Incident on Church Street

Now I,
Won't these streets at night
If you want my advice
I'd stay at home tonight

Outnumbered, his legs came to rest
By the park where children play
Now down on the ground
A sad flower stands
Where a black and blue body lay
Incident on Church Street

Now I,
Wont walk these streets at night
Would really think twice
And stay at home tonight
Stay at home tonight
Stay at home

[Sing4me88]

I like this one, a very intriguing title and I suppose in any ways the start to a good song is to  have a title that catches peoples attention.... it's not the kinda thing many would try to write a song about but maybe that's why this one appeals to me, it's different that way, and that's not to deride the penmanship of this song as there's some great lines in there, especially 'the band of furious hands'... I like the chorus it's simple yet effective and it delivers quite a strong and serious message without any pomp or histrionics. it's very clever writing really

[Jess]

I love the chorus, especially love the rhymes that you've used I like the theme too, it's unusual and nice to read something that's not about love. One of the best chorus' I've read on this forum so far x

[Dead Weight]

Great storytelling in this song.  Powerful stuff. 

[paulmclay]

wow, thank you all for the feedback. I'm quite pleased with this song.