Hi all, I was just wondering if I could get some feedback on this particular song of mine, I've got a whole load more I'll fire at you at some other time but this one is one I'm needing input on.
I've got the chords down, and I've got the melodies sorted, I just think this song is really too dark? I just want some input on this, I'm sure if I heard somebody had written this, then I'd be really worried for their welfare, but I can genuinely say that I'm fine, and I'm not suicidal, I just have a method of adopting a feeling, and amplifying it into the lyrics. Hey it's maybe not too bad, but I'll let you all be the judges.
"I'm on a path that leads to nowhere,
don't know where I've been,
I'm just spinning circles,
my only company's the wind,
that guides my sails,
through the storm.
And my bitterness inside,
keeps me warm.
All my memories have faded,
from what life used to be,
I'm so lost and I need found,
won't you come and save me,
from myself,
before I die.
Hell I'm so lonely,
I could cry.
Every single drop of happiness,
has drained from my soul,
I'm so blind with tears,
don't know which way to go,
to find you,
to cure my sorrow.
If this is the last you hear from me,
call the police tomorrow.
I'm so lost and I need found,
yeah, I'm so lost and I need found,
won't you come and save me.
I'm so lost and I need found.
If this is the last you hear from me,
call the police tomorrow
call the police tomorrow (Repeat to fade)"