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(Don't read if your name is Arvin)

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Jess

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« on: January 10, 2013, 08:44:32 PM »
Okay so I wrote this song about a real experience (young 'love' and all that) but as you can see it has a name...an unusual name...so if the person who reads this is the person it's about then things are going to be very awkward in class tomorrow...so here goes...

Oh Arvin
Oh Arvin never called anyone darling but I wanted you to be my first
So Arvin all these girls say you’re Prince Charming how do I explain your love is cursed?
Cos you can’t keep all the promises that you make
Stupid girl- dating you was a big mistake
Umm Arvin you’re the only one who’s laughing why’d you pick my heart to break?

How do you think it felt for me to admit my love?
Why’d you take that as your cue to abuse our trust?
It’s a newsflash baby
I've been feeling unloved lately
In fact do you even have a heart?
Why’s love made to fall apart?

Hey Arvin when we meet my heart is burning cos I want to tell you how I feel
So Arvin why’d you deny what they’re asking if you know the spark we had was real?
Cos we can’t build all the bridges that you burnt down
Stupid guy who ran our love into the ground
Here Arvin the spare keys to your apartment give them to your next unlucky girl

How do you think it felt for me to admit my love?
Why’d you take that as your cue to abuse our trust?
It’s a newsflash baby
I've been feeling unloved lately
In fact do you even have a heart?
Why’s love made to fall apart?

But here we are side by side
Arvin grabs my hand
He says we need to talk
I say I don’t understand
So he reveals his love
Then leans in for a kiss-
As I push him off I say this:

How do you think it felt for me to admit my love?
You’re not gunna sweep me off my feet like you’re the only one
Who loves me baby
I won’t be your leading lady
Cos I’m still mending my broken heart
Oh and letting my life start

Who Arvin? Can't believe I used to like him now he's lost the best he'll ever have...
"When writing a song, if your afraid to suck, you'll never write a note" -Jeff Boyle

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« Reply #1 on: January 11, 2013, 07:39:11 AM »
I really liked this. I love the way how it all rhymed and flowed well. I think you have really good writing skills xx
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« Reply #2 on: January 12, 2013, 07:15:39 PM »
Thank you I'm really glad you liked it x
"When writing a song, if your afraid to suck, you'll never write a note" -Jeff Boyle

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« Reply #3 on: January 13, 2013, 09:34:49 PM »
I like this one, it flows really nicely and has some great lines also. Probably best if 'Arvin' doesn't read or her it as it might lead to a very awkward conversation at your next time of meeting ;)

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« Reply #4 on: February 18, 2013, 09:19:44 AM »
Thank you and fingers crossed he doesn't read it  :)
"When writing a song, if your afraid to suck, you'll never write a note" -Jeff Boyle