I would just like to say, the few people I have shown this too have suggested I remove the curses. But, because I come from a northern town in England, this is literally the common use of the word, just in the middle of sentences. Also, I think swearing is some of the strongest, most emotive language and something songwriters often fail to use enough. Any criticism at all would be really appreciated.
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Verse:
Sittin' on the last bus,
watching all the lads go
out for the night.
Smell of mischief in the air,
there's anxious coppers everywhere
feeling up for a fight.
The weathers fucking lashing down,
this town is full of snakes and clowns
on the prowl for a bite.
I'm really feeling out of place
this coming storm i'll have to brace,
and try to hold tight.
Chorus:
And then she turns around to me and says
'Do you feel alright?
When we get in and dry,
we can just turn off the light
Cause it goes, on and on, its the way its got be,
yeah it goes, on and on, like an unchanged melody.'
Verse 2:
This northern town's a fucking joke
every bodies either blipped or broke
and its riddled with crime.
I've gotta get away from here,
just fucking fade away and disappear
before i'm stuck in the grime.
These gales are fucking blowing me
in a direction I dont wonna be
but ive not got the fight
this town will be the end of me
this decree lies within debris
my final plea for decency
Chorus:
And then she turns around to me and says
'Do you feel alright?
When we get in and dry,
we can just turn off the light
Cause it goes, on and on, its the way its got be,
yeah it goes, on and on, like an unchanged melody.'