This picking pattern is making me think a folk duet would be great here.
It is a little disjointed as stands, as people have mentioned. But the benefit to the writing stage is that we can see the fragments and how we would each attack it from here
Me:
I would strip down to acoustic guitars, percussion, and two part hamonies, with some soft oohs. But then, such is my wont when I hear a potential fingerpicker
The main guitar pattern is pretty but simple, so the ear needs to be dragged from it quickly, especially the ear of another muso.
The "Good in the hood" lyric made me prick up, glad to see they were in inverted commas, and makes me wonder as to the main protagonist...
The lyrics are darker than you sold them via the vocal. Perhaps I am becoming too accustomed to your vocal style, but some more angst in the delivery would have sold "dark" to me quicker. But this is a demo as you say...
Nice melodies, nice rhythmic ideas and all round a thinker
JNx
