Hello guys. This is one of my first lyrics and as English is not my mother tongue, so I would like that whenever I post one of my lyrics here you guys help me and tell me if there's something sounding strange or wrong in it (and in my texts too). As I said in my introduction topic, I'm mostly influenced by British rock bands like The Clash, The Libertines, Babyshambles, Arctic Monkeys and The Smiths. I often use some brit slangs in my songs too. For now I won't tell the exact meaning of the song, because I want to know if you can find it out (though I don't think it's too difficult). These lyrics are still unfinished, but here it goes as it is by now:
"Johnny bought some fine hats
The day he went to 24 May Street
But they are catching dust in his rack
Cause he can’t meet a fucking Mary
The closest he got to it
Was when a hand caressed his head
But he’s now tired of it
Although he had by then spat
You see that girl under the lamp post?
The one that’s smoking that cheap cigarette
See, you can have her for half a pony
It’ll be meaningless and you won’t be so glad"
Thanks!
