[Binladeda]

 This is a song I'm quite keen on. I wrote this for a special person , and am hoping it will turn into a forum collaboration..........so any advice on any aspect of this will be much appreciated. For some reason the volumes seem to drop when the drums kick in...I've tried to stop it but it happens every time I mix it ??...The lyrics (which I always struggle with) need some work....I think.....and I'm not to sure about the structure...and on and on and....Anyway hope you like     http://soundcloud.com/binladeda/rocket                                                                     

Lyrics
So this is how our story ends
I say goodbye to you again
First the flood and then the drought
The fires gone, the fires burnt right
Down is all I feel
Telephone don't answer
Don't you feel the same thing now

And like a rocket to the moon, I love you
And hope you feel the same way to
I love you
I love you

Time has passed, you've gone away
I think about the days we were ok
Looking back, I think I knew
The lies you told, they never would come
True, it's hard to see
Just don't know the answer
In my heart, the same thing now

Chorus

So this is where it's come to now
I need to move, I never can somehow
If I could, I'd run away
Leave this hurt and memories
Today is just the same
The future looks no better
I see the stars and think of you

Chorus

etc. etc.

[James Nighthawk]

Melodic MOR/AOR rock done well.

I like the melodies. The lyrics. The guitar motifs. I like it in general in fact!

I would find ways to:

-Vary the dynamics a little more. A section 3/4 in where the drums go sparse perhaps
-Or...cut the song down 30-60 seconds
-Think about backing vocals to lift the chorus sections, to define where the choruses stand
-Production wise it is tinny and "snappy" on the guitars, but largely home recording traits. At least it is clear and forward

[S.T.C]

Nice song mate...

I`ve got some lyrics that need  music just like this[but a bit rockier]..but i want a female voice...interested..

[nooms]

lovely relaxed feel, i like the edge to your vocal, character..
sounds like twelve string strum, rich and the beautiful gtr break..
thing is the mix you open with is pretty much the same that you end with..
perhaps a strategic harmony vocal and a 'proud' hammondy organ would work it up a little, but just a little..
really nice song and grows nicely on repeated listens
its almost like swearing sometimes using i love you in a chorus but you put it across well, sounds right.
very nice track bin..

[montydog]

This is very relaxing and nicely recorded. Your voice has a vulnerable edge to it which works perfectly for this song - a little like Jerry Garcia I thought.

Could do with a bit more variation in the arrangement as others have said but this is a real grower and kind of gets under your skin after a few listens.

Great lead guitar BTW.

[Kafla]

that chorus is stunning Binladeda

The big build up I thought was leading to an anthemic melody but you paused and went all elegant - absolutely beautiful songwriting

Listen who really cares about the lyrics I believed every word you said - you can't manufacture that

The guitars and keyboard really work the arrangement nicely

I really love this  

[andy5544]

very nice mate 

[flossie]

Well you know what I think don't you 

[digger72]

Hi,

It's nice, but i preferred the rockier track you did not long back.
That said, I'm a firm believer that you should write what you want to say, and say it the way you want it to be heard.

Production was good.

Digger

[tina m]

loved the guitars & your voice is  so good & yes maybe the lyrics were a bit hit & miss but like kafla said the way you sang them they did sound realy profound & lets face it ive only got to hear i love you in a chorus & im sold on it...& rockets are always good in songs
but i thought the production was outstanding  the guitars sound great & the whole mix is realy big & loud....thats some shed youve got!

[gerrybhoy]

Pleasant listen, some nice guitar work, very laid back sound, I liked it.

[Michael]

What kind of guitars are you playing in this one? Cause they sound awesome 
Loving the part in the beginning where the electric one comes in and gives that beautiful contrast to the acoustic ones.
I found it a bit hard to understand the vocals in the mix, I'd give them a bit of a boost, 'cause you do have a beautiful voice...

Drums sound a bit too synthetic for a song like this I think, would have preferred a more acoustic and organic sound here.

[james bond 007]

mr binman this  sounds like a bond theme to me ....the cold war.. the space race ..me on the moon with some lunar bond girl....Q gives me a lamborgini moon buggy ..M  gives me a licence to kill in space & a single breasted tuxedo space suit
why havent you entered it in the bond competition ?

the names bond..james bond 

[Florida Mike]

Very nice, I like it... a few comments ---I wish the electronic drum track was programmed with some fills in and out of the chorus...at times I wish the vocal was more up front in the mix, and after the solo it may work to modulate the progression a whole step up for interest.
Nice work!
Cheers!

[misswhiterabbit]

I like this, the chorus is great, the vocals came out really well you've got such a nice tone to your voice and I love the clarity of the guitar sound (I can never get that myself). The drums are the only bug for me, just need a little more programming so they sound less programmed! Haha! The strings are a nice touch and actually don't sound to synthetic. Only advice I'd give is to bring the volume down at the end of each long note, will make it sound a bit more natural, like the player has reached the end of the bow. Bit of a faff I know but makes a big difference I find.  Oh very nice solo by the way.