[cj allen]

just started writing some music to these words could be an OK song, Not sure if the lyrics are that strong. let me know?



 I LOVE YOU TWICE

Nothings new, Nothings new to you
You make it better you do
And I love you twice

You came along, You came along long way
Never called it a day
And I love you twice

See, See the sky, See how the sky has no choice
And I love you twice

Very slow, very slow you move
You move so smooth
And I love you twice

Go on, go on and use my name
I will take the blame
And I love you twice

See, see how, see how it tastes so nice
And I love you twice

[Stroller2010]

I'm not too sure the lyric are strong enough really. The "I love you twice" bit seems like it has been tagged on for no apparent reason. I like the rhythm of it without the "I love you twice" lines.

[The Corsair]

It's not all that clever a line, 'I love you twice'. I think it's good once (or twice) in a chorus but peppering it around the rest of the lyrics kinda ruins them IMO

[Sing4me88]

I think there is definitely a good solid foundation of a good song in there I think the structure maybe needs a little more working on. I think if you merge two verse into one and then add the 'I love you twice' line on at the end of each verse, possibly repeating it for effect, it might be a more viable approach. I hasten to add that I'm a complete new comer and this is just my opinion. I do like the lyric and think there is a very good idea and some clever lyrics in there !