[Soul Punk]

Hi

This is probably the most personal piece I have ever written

the song is about the very complicated relationship I have with my mother growing up as she suffers from Bipolar disorder sadly, I havent been able to write anything concrete thats honest yet endearing and while I struggle to critique myself due to the attachment, I was hoping to know if you felt the story as well as letting me know your opinion

please do not let the sad topic sway your opinion, thank you

It's called Matchstick

Matchstick

You and I, We ain't made for each other
But I guess minimum wage will have to do
I guess that , you can sleep tight now
I've got no money, but piece of mind
You'll still believe in me tomorrow night

Well I tried to do right in life
swear and die by a code
that I never really knew
Matchstick, I'll stick around
even though I can't save you

Wish I was a blue eyed angel
so I could fan the crimson flames
that dance an ugly routine in your head
while your face smiles and lies again
I'm sorry all I've got is blue eyes

I'll prove I try to keep calm
but I'm just a human sometimes
scoring points for sport, losing sight
We should be on the same team
What's really important now?

Well I tried to do right in life
swear and die by a code
that I never really knew
Matchstick, I'll stick around
even though I can't save you

[habiTat]

Having read your introduction I was able to understand more what the song was about. I often think it's a shame songs can't be properly introduced on albums as it is so important to know where the writer is coming from. That said, it's fairly clear what you're saying although without your introduction I may have interpreted it as a couple's relationship as opposed to mother & child.

I really like the imagery, the lines "so I could fan the crimson flames
                                              that dance an ugly routine in your head"
very nice, a clever and poetic way to describe your struggle with calming and dealing with your mum's illness.

Mate this is such a deep and sensitive subject and I think you've tackled it really well. Hats off 

Do you have a melody? IMO this really deserves a heartfelt, emotional performance. Not too heavy, just gentle and melancholic, it's not something which would be served well by an angry or high tempo performance I think (my concern is based on your username, I can't think if I've heard any of your songs). The message in the song is one of reassurance, and should be said gently I think.

Great job 

[Dutchbeat]

beautiful lyrics

[Soul Punk]

Sorry for the late reply lads

was on a royal piss up in Newcastle

Habitat I do have a melody, It's very basic and stripped down
I am only working with an acoustic guitar and a pair of tights over my mic

sounds silly but its creating the sound I like for the lyrics

as for your favourite lyrics thanks very much, My writing is always to 'paint a story'

thanks for your time Dutchbeat and Habitat

[Jukentins]

Very nice lyrics for sure!

Loved these parts:

"Wish I was a blue eyed angel
so I could fan the crimson flames
that dance an ugly routine in your head"

and

"Wish I was a blue eyed angel
so I could fan the crimson flames
that dance an ugly routine in your head"

Brought tears to my eyes, seriously. Beautiful.

[The Corsair]

[Soul Punk]

Thanks guys

as said previously i find it immensely difficult to write personal songs
even though the characters i invent have parts of my life included

your opinions are highly valued as always

[Placid]

You're a great lyricist when you're hones. Love the imagery and a great chorus. Would have loved some rhyme