[S.T.C]

Probably go back to this one...just sat down and wrote it...

in the mind of you
i only do,what you want me to
and if you left me
i could easily break in two
in the mind of you.

in the mind of me
i`ve already left you,babe
go ahead and dig my grave
won`t break my heart in two
in the mind of me..

love, divides and conquers us
equalizes,what we won`t give up
eliminates the chances
and stops all the happiness..

in the mind of us
we can stick together ,fall apart
finish what we can`t start
rise above it ,like we`re so smart
in the mind of us

in the mind of you
it`s all brand new
you never see it any other way
in your light rays
in the mind of you.

in the mind of me
we always disagree
theres never any empathy
when you put that knife in
in the mind of me.

in the mind of you
in the mind of me
things get torn apart
can`t you see

in the mind of us
we can stick together ,fall apart
finish what we can`t start
rise above it ,like we`re so smart
in the mind of us





 

[Stroller2010]

This is good, the third bit is my highlight. I like the five lines per verse thing, I can never get that to work right. Would sound good with music I think.

[titiami]

its a fairly written song, would like to hear it with a melody, the rhyming is perfect too.

[habiTat]

Nice one STC, have you sorted a melody for it? I like the repetition of the phrase throughout the verses.

Good Job

[S.T.C]

Nice one STC, have you sorted a melody for it? I like the repetition of the phrase throughout the verses.

Good Job

I don`t make music Hab...only words.

[habiTat]

Nice one STC, have you sorted a melody for it? I like the repetition of the phrase throughout the verses.

Good Job

I don`t make music Hab...only words.

You must be tempted though sometimes..?

[S.T.C]

Nice one STC, have you sorted a melody for it? I like the repetition of the phrase throughout the verses.

Good Job

I don`t make music Hab...only words.

You must be tempted though sometimes..?

No..i have a guitar..had a drum kit yrs ago.......but i don`t have any means of recording,don`t know a thing about music software,,,,i`m not a great singer.. unless i keep to one style of song....so for me it`s the pen(or keyboard) thats were i make my music.

[habiTat]

Nice one STC, have you sorted a melody for it? I like the repetition of the phrase throughout the verses.

Good Job

I don`t make music Hab...only words.

You must be tempted though sometimes..?

No..i have a guitar..had a drum kit yrs ago.......but i don`t have any means of recording,don`t know a thing about music software,,,,i`m not a great singer.. unless i keep to one style of song....so for me it`s the pen(or keyboard) thats were i make my music.

I guess we each have our own way of working. I tend to write something and the melody develops as I'm writing. I then can't wait to compose it.

[S.T.C]

Yeah if i could do it,or thought i would do a good job at it i would love too... but it`s not my strong point,words are..so i will leave it to others with the talent to create music ....it does mean i`m free to write a lot more,,