[shanelyons]

hi everyone just thought i would upload the original recording of my own song "A love Story" this is the cut down version of the collaboration im am currently doing with flossie, please let me know what you think and sorry for the bad recording

http://soundcloud.com/shanelyons90/a-love-story-v2
all the best, shane

[flossie]

Hi Shane,

As I said before to you it's so interesting how the same lyrics can produce two totally different songs like stc's blueprint challenge!!!

I love this version, it's moody and laid back and you have a great voice, and thanks for being so tolerant letting me at your lyrics, especially when you already written the music 

You should get a few other forum members mooching along soon!!

x

[S.T.C]

Interesting difference...isn`t there,,shades of wonderwall..in this or chords...but overall nice melody...i wouldn't have guessed they were the same lyrics.

[digger72]

Hi Shane,

Your version has a similar vibe to Fake Plastic Trees by Radiohead. Like it.
It's nice as a stripped down version. I would like to hear some vocal harmonies in there in and around the chorus.

Cheers,

Digger

[shanelyons]

hi thanks for your replies, i will try and record it properly if i get a chance but i agree it does need harmonies, digger i agree it does have a similar vibe to Fake Plastic Tress i like that sort of vibe nice a chilled i suppose . songsthatcry the chords are as follows with a Capo 3rd fret not sure if any of the chords are used perhaps you could tell me?

v
E7sus4
Em9
Asus2sus4
A9sus4

c
Esus4
Amaj9
Esus4
B7sus4

All the best, shane

[man of simple pleasures]

yeah great stuff! would sound better getting into the vocals a bit more maybes cause its a quiet recording couldnt make out some of the lyrics you were singing! i like the vibe of it, acoustic sounds good like!

[ronalr]

I like this song a lot...great chord progression and the acoustic guitar tone sounds sweet...I would like to hear the vocals a little louder though.....great work!!

[bewarethisboy]

this is great!! Puts me in mind of the late and very very great John Martyn. Your vocal pitch is so good it disappears behind the dominant guitar tones in a couple of places - it needs pulling forward - easy fix twiddle some nobs a smidge. (I hope James N will provide a more technical assist) Only other thing - sorry this is me - it would be really really really spot on if there was a minute off it. But I really love this good work. BTB

[Michael]

Wow, never would have guessed that this is the same song flossie made...
The vocal melody is really beautiful (if a bit quiet), and the purely acoustic style fits this perfectly!

Looking forward to hearing more of these

[shanelyons]

thanks to everyone for your replies i have just uploaded a cleaner version of the song onto sound cloud so hopefully you can all hear it alot better there are some "off" notes so sorry about that

all the best shane

http://soundcloud.com/shanelyons90/a-love-story-v2

[habiTat]

I'm finding this a bit late, and have not yet listened to the other version. I really like this, It's really chilled out. I'm a sucker for the stripped back vocal/guitar thing and this is right up my street.

Excellent stuff

[shanelyons]

habiTat thank you im glad you enjoyed it, personally i think there is nothing better then just a guitar and vocal its a nice raw sound and your right its very chilled

all the best, shane

[Boydie]

I really like this as well

The whole thing feels "bigger" than just a vocal & guitar somehow

I think there is some subtle double tracked vocals that work really nicely

As a song I would like to hear the arrangement develop a little through the track a little - perhaps a drastic variation in the rhythm / attack would also add a bit of spice to shake things up a little

Overall though I really liked this and could happily listen to an album of this kind of stuff - great job

[shanelyons]

Boydie thanks for taking the time to listen, i hear what your saying and couldn't agree more with you i think it needs more texture to the sound and needs to be more striking.

all the best, shane

[montydog]

I haven't heard the original so I'll just concentrate on this.

Crikey! Beautiful song. The whole thing has a lovely, soft, ethereal quality. Great relaxed guitar playing a vocal delivery - it draws you in and makes you listen. It's subtle and quite, quite wonderful.

Congrats on making such a gorgeous recording.