[VladB]

Hi to all. I'm new here as i decided to share my music with you.
Few weeks ago i recorded my first song.  So I will be very happy, if you check it out. It's called "Run".  Please, don't be too hard on me, because it's my first experience of songwriting.
You can find it here: 

So the lyrics are

Verse
She talks the way that makes you forget your past
She has a wonderful voice. Soft and clear one
She has a look that only the angel has
She always says: "Forever Nothing Lasts"
Pre-Chorus
And now she's going away so fast
And I'm standing here alone on road dust
And when she looked right into my eyes
I understood that I gonna gonna

Chorus:
Run, run and Grab her arm
And never let go
Feeling her every breath and her kindly soul
Run, run and look at her
And no turning back
Run, run and when I reach
Will Say "I Love U"

Verse
She ties her hair behind in a ponytail
When somebody laughs at her, she just doesn't care
She moves the way that only the fire does
And there's a shiny sparkle in her eyes

Pre-Chorus
And now she's going away so fast
And I'm standing here alone on road dust
And when she looked right into my eyes
I understood that I gonna gonna

Chorus:
Run, run and Grab her arm
And never let go
Feeling her every breath and her kindly soul
Run, run and look at her
And no turning back
Run, run and when I reach
Will Say "I Love U"
 
Bridge:
Now I'm standing here alone on  road dust
And she passed by me, she passed
(Passed, Passed, Passed)
Now I'm standing here alone on road dust
(Run, Run, Run)

Chorus:
I gonna run, run and Grab her arm
And never let go
Feeling her every breath and her kindly soul
Run, run and look at her
And no turning back
Run, run and when I reach
Will Say "I Love U"

[S.T.C]

Good enough tune....Vlad

[VladB]

Thank you

[man of simple pleasures]

poptastic, could see this one produced for the euro boyband market! nice guitar!

[VladB]

Thanks =)

[jim morrison]

Nice one mate, very nice little tune there!

[VladB]

Thank you 

[bewarethisboy]

this great good luck with it. BTB

[VladB]

Thanks 

[RichyRowlatt]

Structure's good Vlad, runs really well. Stick at it buddy, very good.

[Boydie]

There is some nice phrasing in here that elevates it above the "run of the mill" singer with a guitar songs

You clearly have some gear at your disposal to do the vocal effects so it may be worth experimenting with some more instrumentation - I think drums would elevate the track even more

I am not sure the accent works with the lyric - althoug I appreciate that you don't have much choice but some accents (Italian, Spanish) seem to suit poppy songs better than others

Nice song though and the vocal was great