Hello everyone.
I just joined this forum, and I'm really looking forward to reading and hearing lots of songs, as well as i am looking forward to getting your response on some of my own songs. I'm quite new to songwriting, so i figured out this would be a good place to get some new ideas.
Anyways, i spent the last few hours writing this song. I went for a walk with a girl I've really liked for a long time this evening, but I've had quite a hard time finding out whether she felt the same way about me. Fortunately, she does, and we held hands for the first time. While we were walking, many ideas came into my head, and i wrote them into this text when i got home. I haven't written the music yet, so i guess you can say that so far it is just a poem. I would appreciate any feedback, good or bad - and I'll promise to review some of your songs too
So here it is:Church bells ring as the clock strikes nine,
At the end of the road I see your face
I need directions, I need a sign
Am I in the right place?
Sailing in a sea of doubt
A sea in which I can barely float
Are you, like I, on a cloud
Or simply just on a boat?
The fog makes the stars seem so vague
On the September sky
Just like all the thoughts in my head
My thoughts about you and I
We soar through the dark city at night
I ask you to slacken your speed
A smile on your face, a time and a place
As my heart admits its defeat
Lives can change in seconds
Change for good or bad
I’m pretty sure you changed my life
The second our hands met
Sailing in a sea of doubt
Only things have changed
You are with me on my cloud
Together we float
As I walk home, I look to the sky
I smile at what I see
It seems the whole world has changed
And a star shines down on me
