[travis]

Hi Folks
I see this as an up tempo country number written for a female singer.
Travis

One Day the Dams Gonna Burst (Country )
v
She's had enough of bad guys
the ones that fill her full of lies
All the pain, and all the hurt
one day the dams gonna burst

v
She's happy on her own
not taking anymore guys home
Creeping off while she's asleep
with secrets she tried to keep

c
One day the dams gonna burst
who's gonna get it first?
She'll drag you by the tail
cut you deep with those nails
one day the dams gonna burst

v
She don't need no pretense
or for you to pay her rent
Don't need your sticky paws
trying to get thru her door

v
She's had enough of the clowns
too many in this town
Better find yourself a nurse
soon the dams gonna burst

c
One day the dams gonna burst
who's gonna get it first?
She'll drag you by the tail
cut you deep with those nails
one day the dams gonna burs

[S.T.C]

Lyrics don`t get that much FB. Posting too much, to quickly will reduce further comments!

I think your a traditional writer....lyrics suited towards a country theme.....i`m not going to pretend that there  new or outstanding,but you write well according to your needs and that.of your friends...

[travis]

Thanks for the advice.I have been on a few forums and their rule is usually one lyric per day, for my ignorance I apologise,  but I am new and yet to find my way around the site.
I'm a little confused re your other comments though? I don't usually write for my friends or my needs for that matter, but you are of course entitled to your opinion, as that's what it's all about.
I would of course rather you comment on the lyric, rather than mount an assassination job on myself who you don't know personally. I came on the site for lyric and song critique not warranted and unkind abuse.I can live with the fact that you don't like country, that's fine, each to their own but that's what I do.
Regards
Travis

[S.T.C]

The rule on posting songs is one  per week....lyrics are more flexible....but everyday is too much....you`ve not got any comments on your other song,,maybe that should be telling you something!

[travis]

Yes as I mentioned in my reply I'm new, as you were once.Thanks god most sites don't have"helping hands" like you among their regular  posters.I didn't know this when I posted my lyrics.Perhaps the sites monitor could have put me right?
You really need to get a little humility son.
Travis

[S.T.C]

 

Send my regards to your next forum.....

[travis]

As I said, thanks for your hospitality.

[titiami]

I'm a fan of don williams and these lyrics remind me of some of his song, not that i'm saying they dont sound origional , they are good and would make a grea country song.

[travis]

Hi
Thanks for your comments,Yeah i like Don too but I thought a female may work?
Regards
Travis