[MarkQuinn]

Hello,

This is my first song review post on here, as this is technically my first song, and i'm expecting and hoping for a decent mix of responses.

I enjoy writing mainstream/radio ready/possibly generic Pop for other artists in the vain (and faint) hope that the right person might hear it and allow me to make a career out of songwriting

I know that statement is not going to please certain people but i thought it best to be honest.

I'm aware i'm yet to critique any other songs, i've not used the forum till now seeing as I hadn't had any material of my own to publish, i'm now hoping to be a regular contributor, also hoping to be a potential collaborator, I didn't think it would be very constructive just to randomly start making bland critiques on other songs just to have people listen to my own

Thank you for any comments in advance

http://soundcloud.com/markquinnmusic/push-you




I’m gonna have to……Push you for a…..
I’m gonna have to…..

I’m gonna have to push you for an answer

You think you look tough looking from above at me
Maybe that’s the price I pay for shifting harmony
And I can’t help feeling amused, That you still stare at me confused
And these bullet holes the message they send is this has to end

And maybe now it’s time decide if you need me in your life your life
I’m gonna have to push you for an answer, push you for an answer
Push you for an answer push you for an answer

You think you look cool, looking like a fool at me
Maybe that’s the price I pay to keep your company
And I can’t help feeling amused, when you say theres no need to choose
But these brand new scars the feelings the bring change everything

And maybe now it’s time decide if you need me in your life your life
I’m gonna have to push you for an answer, push you for an answer
Push you for an answer push you for an answer
And maybe now it’s time decide if you need me in your life your life
I’m gonna have to push you for an answer, push you for an answer
Push you for an answer push you for an answer

[S.T.C]

Catchy...danceable ..tune..good hook..

But think it lacks a bit of fluency in parts... probably easy to sort out.

[ABeautifulVirus]

what i find very interesting about this is the unique application of a reggae/ska accentuation of the synths on the 2 and 4 between the downbeats- that is very cool.

i like the tune- kinda a Eurodance genre imo


-Daren

[Dutchbeat]

liked the happy tune, but the start towards that was a bit messy

i think you have build this entirely from samples...

the sound is a bit thin,and a sound like that organ-like seems a bit old-fashion between the other sounds
but for the rest, a very happy and danceable tune

welcome to the forum, Mark

[Binladeda]

very good...liked the vocals...good strong, confident voice . Very well suited to the type of music that you're trying to achieve. Thought the structure/construction needs a bit of work. The best part for me was the section that started around 2.03. I would try and work that into the start, the build after that would set the song up nicely. Then I would repeat it at least twice .......then you'd have a new song....so forget everything I've just said ...Good work

[MarkQuinn]

Thanks very much for all the comments so far, really appreciated.

I'm interested that through the comments on here and other places theres seems to be a common theme about the structure of the song not being quite right, if anyone could go into a little more detail about his that would be great.

Other than that thanks again.

[The Corsair]

Lyrically it's very repetitive, relying on a few key phrases worked into different sentences, which can be interesting and clever but I don't think you've quite pulled it off.

'You think you look cool, looking like a fool at me
Maybe that’s the price I pay to keep your company'
ends up being a very cool set of lines, but the effect is somewhat lessened because you've already used the 'maybe that's the price I pay to...' thing earlier. It seems like repetition for repetition's sake, not because it adds anything (IMO the first use of it is somewhat meaningless and could use different wording to achieve the same effect, making the above bit better as well)

[tone]

It's well produced, and quite hooky. I'm probably not the best person to review this because it's the sort of music I would never seek out, but my main criticism would be that the backing track is a little too repetitive. Having said that the break at about 2.30 into half time is very cool and gives the track much more depth.

I can imagine people dancing to this - a good club track for sure. Best of luck with it and welcome to the forum.