This is very, very stong writing.
The restraint is remarkable. The lines of vocals have plenty of open space. The piano line is sparse yet just enough.
The change at 2.16 is very powerful, a wonderful surpise and perfectly timed.
The lyrics are great
There's got to be someway to reach you tonight
Optical light and telephone lines
A collection of pixels is not close enough
The resolutions there
The definition in every lineThis walks the fine line between metaphor and statement. I love the sentiment of modern tech bringing us closer and yet not compensating on a real, human level. Nothing like real human contact. "Ghost" makes wonderful sense in context here.
As a demo is is perfectly fine at presenting the song. The arrangement largely works a charm. I would perhaps have brought the drums in a
little less busy, allowing one more gear change before the change.
The only "issues" with the production I have are the standard home recording limitations (programmed stings/drums), so, as I say, really really great work within your set up
The hint of religiosity falls flat for me. Stanza three seems to be a misfit. But, I am sure there is reasoning in which case leave it well alone. I does provide an old vs new to the lyrical ideas however.
The vocal is perhaps the strongest I have heard from you. A great balance of emotion and detail, with great pitching (only once could I hear the autotuner in action this time, and barely at that!)