[titiami]

FRIENDSHIP
CHORUS– My mistake,
              now our friendship is at stake,
              you’re breaking off the ties,
              coz you can’t live with my face in your eyes.
She said you had stopped caring,
and she needed a shoulder,
until I held her,
that’s when I needed her too,
our first kiss was behind your back,
I was giving her things she lacked
that’s what I believed,
until you caught us red handed,

CHORUS– My mistake,
              now our friendship is at stake,
              you’re breaking off the ties,
              coz you can’t live with my face in your eyes.

Her tears fell in my heart,
her pain came to my head,
I only wanted to give her my hand,
then her lips touched mine,
and I fell to the ground,
and my world turned round,
and our friendship went down hard,

CHORUS– My mistake,
              now our friendship is at stake,
              you’re breaking off the ties,
              coz you can’t live with my face in your eyes.

I put a knife at your back,
I know you still ache,
wish I could mend this,
but the past I cannot amend,
she was your girl,
and you were not over till I stepped in,


CHORUS– My mistake,
              now our friendship is at stake,
              you’re breaking off the ties,
              coz you can’t live with my face in your eyes.

[Stroller2010]

This is good, it's a very good concept, you don't get many songs that put the narrator in the wrong. I like the chorus, it suits the whole song well and flows nicely. Good stuff.

[travis]

Hi
I like what you have but the verses seem to have different numbers of lines.I think this needs checking, but overall a good write
Travis

[Dutchbeat]

It is great!
yeah

the pace is also absolutely right
smashing!

[titiami]

thank you all for the feed back. I'll definitely do something about the lines. thank you.