Hi guys, here are the lyrics to a song ive been writing. I have a sort of folky tune in my head with regards to the music but I would like to know what people think of the lyrics. I would welcome any constructive comments. Thanks.
King John’s Treasure
Verse 1:
C F C G
Down by the fenland fields, two watermen went walking.
C F
Their pockets full, their bottles dry.
C G C
And together they were talking.
A fair young maiden they beheld.
Their wealthy landlord’s daughter.
As she sat down to take her ease/ amongst the eves
The brothers came upon her.
Verse 2:
Your father he’s a rogue you know
A man of coin and women
You’ve many brethren long the road
Besides the ones you live with.
In the maiden’s eyes dwelt no surprise
When she heard the brothers talking.
“There’s a great deal more you do not know – and that’s why I go a walking”
Verse 3:
Well walk with us to Boston dear. Yes, we may look poor and ragged
Though yesterday down by the weir
We found some golden flagons
We’ll buy us land & horses
And if you think it proper
One of us could take your hand,
And bear you over yonder
Bridge: C F
The waters parted read-di-ly
G C
The skies were dirty white
Their flagons glinted in the breeze
And she searched their roving eyes...
Verse 4:
“You know dear sirs... I would not know.”
“Which of you can plough, and sow?”
“So take you up your flagons go... and wade in that their water"
The brothers did as they were told...
For each of them was rash and bold
Pretty soon they was dead and cold (pause)
And the maiden she was go- o – one
The maiden she was gone
Violin solo – up beat, lilting – Whistling would be good too.