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ruggedsmooth

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« on: August 16, 2012, 03:37:56 PM »
hey there! i love to sing and i'm getting a bit sick of singing covers, so ive decided to write my own stuff.  i've never really written a song before and would appreciate some feedback.

here's something i scribbled down earlier that i haven't finished:


Wore the medals on the camouflage uniform,
they tied you up and left your wounds
and when i heard you passed that day
i knew you had enough of pain

the angels will bathe you now,
they'll sing you songs,
take your hand, push you along
reassure you that the past is done
as you sit beside the highest one

i walked into a chorus of weeps
that cut so deep and brought me to my knees
and i paced, i wish i had a clue
of where you planned on going to

the angels will bathe you now,
they'll sing you songs,
take your hand, push you along
reassure you that the past is done
as you sit beside the highest one  



« Last Edit: August 16, 2012, 04:51:08 PM by ruggedsmooth »

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« Reply #1 on: August 16, 2012, 05:55:26 PM »
I would say these are American country style  type lyrics...maybe from the 70`s..is that how you see them i wonder?

There not bad by the way,