[vibesville]

There are some really nice parts to this song the best of which is:

'But at this rate every song’s a break up song to me
Sitting on the edge, I’m waiting for a friend, I’m waiting for a friend'

Not keen on the line after that, it sounds like your asking if something else is real or fake if you know what I mean, as apposed to tears?.
Something like 'to help me through this end' or not ;)

Your right about the cliches, something to watch.
I'd work on the lyrics a bit more as relationship songs can be hard to get right.

Anyway, food for thought :)

[Boydie]

I enjoyed this track

I agree with MIHKAY in that the track is a little "clunky" in places - even with the ebbs & flows (which are great by the way) I think the song could flow a little more

Perhaps something to consider is the "arrangement" as I didn't get a real sense of "structure" to the song (verse/chorus/bridge etc.)

I think a stronger structure would "force" you to flow the song from section to section and build in some familiarity

e.g. for me the "every song is a break up song" is a stand out line and melody so I automatically "labelled" this section as the "chorus" / hook

However it was almost 2mins before this section appeared

If you are looking for a "tighter" / more conventional track to have more general "appeal" then I would consider the above

However if you are looking for something a little more different I do think it works well as it is

[Florida Mike]

  Very NICE work, well done. Has a bit of the Simon and Garfunkel vibe ...and for me maybe even a bit of very early "ODESSA" album era Bee Gees (and that's a compliment in my book).

Couple of production comments (opinions)...I like the way the track comes down at 1:10 very much, nice transition. At 2:45 I would love to hear some wind chimes on that chord to really give that dazzle there almost like glass fragments, and lastly at the very end, during the fade, I would love to hear just the bass drum playing the AND of 4 and the 1(downbeat) as you had in the first 19 seconds...like a heart...just on the last 3-4 measures...

Very nice work, enjoyed it .
Cheers...

[mikewyattmusic]

Nice, I loved the drop that happens!! real nicely done, great sound. At first I wasn't too keen on the drums coming in, just felt it didn't fit amazing, but after a few seconds got used to it.

Drums sound a little dead to me (recording wise)

But overall Good stuff.

mike