You are taking it all well James and in the spirit it was intended
I tell you what to do - go away and listen to Ramshackles music - he has this other worldy thing going on - I think it works well for him , he seems to have created a style/niche all of his own
Perhaps this will illustrate my point better - it just sounds more authentic and consistent.
I am in no doubt of the integrity and passion you have for your lyrics and music - that is there for all to see
I have checked out his music, I am quite the fan
You make good points as always Kaf.
You have had longer to grow accustomed to his style, I have only been here since March time, perhaps that is part of it
Yes I do have integrity in what I do, I think all artists should, and a little explanation/defence of choices is healthy, assuming it avoids fingers-in-ear arrogance! Otherwise where is the point in having critiques from anyone!?!
However to counter my own arguments here a little, there are scant few other examples on my album of such old language. Some "ne'er", a "slather" and "nevertheless", maybe a "reprise"...
As such this probably will be the last instance it jars for a while. It has been very eye opening to hear peoples' contrasting views. As always big thanks to everyone for dropping their thoughts on this thread
I don't think I've really posted much music since you joined anyway! I'll say a bit more as I didn't have much time when writing the little tidbit I wrote:
Sometimes, I don't think it is so much the words that don't gel but the delivery.
I didn't have a problem with the words (apart from that one line I mentioned...couldn't work out why you left out the 'are'!!), but I get the feeling it is not your 'natural' voice? It's very breathy and with some 'voice cracking' but because it doesn't feel like your natural voice to me, the cracks and breathyness feels forced, so that the emotion/intrigue that this singing style should inject isn't there.
I know it's easy for me to say as I can just hide behind our singers, but whenever we discuss how to sing a song, it doesn't go much beyond saying 'just be comfortable singing it how you would normally sing it'. That often means changing round lyrics etc. If she can happily belt it out in the shower then we are there
...Anyway, going off the track there.
It could be interesting just to hear you sing it, without thinking about how it should be sung, or putting any thought into it at all
It's difficult to compare lyrics as I never use 'olde' words (leastways not knowingly anyway) even though it might sound that way!! My lyrics are generally vague and abstract which maybe can give an impression of being sophisticated or grand when they are just trivial. Your lyrics are more direct I suppose, often with a metaphor to describe....what it is you are describing
. Which is much harder to do. For me anyways!
At the very end of everything, I think authenticity shouldn't be something you have to think about (I get the impression you do think about it a lot...maybe I'm wrong?). I'm always under the impression that the latest thing I've written is quite different to the previous thing. But in reality it's obviously isn't! The reason is probably that I'm never really aiming for any particular style when writing. When arranging I just work with what I've got (took a bit of time to teach myself to though). Anyway, I lost the point again. Authenticity is there if you go in blind......Ok, just confusing myself now.
Now going to James' latest post, just to add my uninvited thoughts to the world (forum) in general
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I think that what you get out of this review section depends a bit on what you want to get out of song writing/music. Going in broadly, I'd say that everyone here at least wants to improve whether it's for fun, they are pro, or aiming to be pro.
But how can these critiques help us improve if there are no rights and wrongs? Well, I think in order to improve you have to work out what your genre(s) is. It's annoying to have to think you have a genre, but I would say that the critique of a fan of your genre might be more informative that people who don't like your genre anyway. Of course, peoples tastes are (hopefully) broader than 1 genre, as your song writing might be, but you get the idea.
Then based on that, I would say that there is a right and wrong. Sort of. Go by what the fans of your genre think. And go by history. Immerse yourself in music...
Anyway, rambling again.
I mentioned production and you touched on it with the bass. I'm hearing a fair amount of mud, maybe room sound, around 100-150hz which can be why the bass is lost in the song a bit. If that was cleaned up the bass could give some weight and cut through despite just sitting on the roots..
This room sound jars a bit with some of the reverb used as well...
I'm not such a fan of that tinny sounding snare...it's either not deep/heavy enough for the song, or reducing it to a brush hit might be better IMO. The tom fill is nice and maybe using the toms a bit more could add a bit of variety and movement. Not for more fills, just for the general rhythm.
Well...I'll stop brain farting on this thread now...