[hookworm]

here's a song I entered into a country song contest just recently.

Time and time again
You told me these words
But it’s me who bends
These words of yours

You say “You’re my everything”
And all I do is turn away
You tell me it is now spring
I reply with, “am I suppose to love you?”

I’m sorry babe if I don’t
Don’t feel the same as you
I’m sorry but I put up a wall
Cause I don’t trust easily
I’m sorry but I just can’t
Can’t help myself baby

You seem to be buggin’ out
I can tell by your reactions
You think your strikin’ out
But trust me, its me, not you

Am I hurting your feelings?
It seems as though that I’m heartless
And everything is now revealing
It’s self to me and I can see but

I’m sorry babe if I don’t
Don’t feel the same as you
I’m sorry but I put up a wall
Cause I don’t trust easily
I’m sorry but I just can’t
Can’t help myself baby

I can see you crying a river
Over me in the corner of the room
And I see you’re about to quiver
But you give me too much grief

I’m sorry babe if I don’t
Don’t feel the same as you
I’m sorry but I put up a wall
Cause I don’t trust easily
I’m sorry but I just can’t
Can’t help myself baby

Sweet sensation of hope
Friends helping you cope
Relationship down the slope

I’m sorry babe if I don’t
Don’t feel the same as you
I’m sorry but I put up a wall
Cause I don’t trust easily
I’m sorry but I just can’t
Can’t help myself baby

[S.T.C]

tricky to say how well they work,some parts flow better than others!

How did they do in the contest.

[hookworm]

I wont hear back for a couple weeks. can you tell me where I need to improve/change/flow better?

[The Corsair]

Something in the tone of it is clever. I get the sense that the 'narrator' (person who is sorry) is almost feeling more things than usual in feeling sorry for the pain they've caused, to the point where they feel more sorry than they felt 'in love'.

Is that an accident or is that intentional?

Either is good