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Sweet Decay, Another Day

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Nathankeirbond

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« on: May 31, 2012, 10:49:50 PM »
Not finished yet. Story of a boy who is led astray by drugs and schizophrenia,
Ongoing for the past!

Two hands up
Help up to the sky
One hand on the tool
Hoping to feel high

Yesterday in the park
I remember it well
Now all I see is grey
And the long descent to hell

Be careful what you say
There's no one to protect you this this time
20 years too young
20 years and all that fun

All your friends this time
They barely stay a day
As soon as the devil has set
The friends soon fade away

The concrete is sure fine
When you're way out of mind
The winter on the bench doesn't stay
When you inject the guilt away

The company ain't so bad
Though no one else can tell
They see you as being mad
When you start to shout and yell

Mummy she's long gone
Now you miss her so much
Daddy could never really care
How you long for home

That little old street
Where you spent your careless days
You'd trade all this for sunshine
But you can't quite find the way

Wanted to go from first to third person, might make a few changes! Make things a little more evident at times! :)

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« Reply #1 on: May 31, 2012, 11:10:56 PM »
It's very well written I think, but I think it could do with a chorus and the more summarising aspects they introduce...

I know it's not much but I don't have much to say on this song.
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