New Song "Something Unseen" Bu tyou can call it what ever you like.

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singersian97

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« on: April 27, 2012, 09:41:34 PM »
I kinda reworked the lyrics hopefully you'll like it. It's about a girl who cheated on and she did rrealise untill she knew about it and now it seems really obvious. The chorus should be a bit me up beat but not a lot and its quite a slow song. But you can completely change that.  Hope you like it. Siane xx

You got me good, yeah you did,
Now I’m alone and can’t sleep,
I’m just thinking about how we could of been.
C’mon get it together, I won’t take you back.

You got the best me,
I didn’t see,
The tricks you were playing on me,
Now I’m all alone,
Lying here,
Waiting for something unknown.

 The way you talked to me,
It’s hard to think how I didn’t see,
Now it’s so obvious,
You didn’t love me,
C’mon get it together, you won’t break me.

You got the best me,
I didn’t see,
The tricks you were playing on me,
Now I’m all alone,
Lying here,
Waiting for something unknown.

(You got the best of me, me, me)
(Now I’m all alone)
Waiting for something unknown(/center/)

I'm open to all reworks of it and constructive critisism. (Sorry if I spelt it wrong!)

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« Reply #1 on: April 28, 2012, 07:06:03 AM »
Hey. I'm more than willing to review your work but I'll hold off for now until you review a few other people's stuff. It's just the way we handle it here, basically a 'get out what you put in' type thing.
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