[melfen]

Boy you got me good, boy you got me bad,
sitting here not sleepin, sittin here just thinkin,
Thinkin how we shoulda been, thinkin how we coulda been.

C,mon we can get it together, we can mend and be forever.

We had it good, we were the best, we put each other to the test,
We pushed hard and to the limit, hurtin each other,
We ****** up, now we can start over.

C,mon we can get it together, we can mend and be forever.

Sorry it's the way I am pushing hard and being selfish,
But it's not just me it is you too,
Lets stop playing each other and taking the ****

C,mon we can get it together, we can mend and be forever.

We can do it I know we can, I'll be your ***** and you be my man,
Don't care what people say, no one knows the games we play,
No one else understands me, we are the same we are meant to be.

C,mon we can get it together, we can mend and be forever.

[The Corsair]

Interesting... I can't say I'm raving about it though. I think my biggest issue is the density of swear words. Swearing is good and effective, it suggests passion. But, just like marshmallows, too many gets sickening. I think you're hitting the marshmallow limit on swear words.

I know this seems hypocritical, given that I'm often quite swear-heavy in my music, but it's all about balance. I think there are some places where the swearing could be toned down in your piece.

Then again, I'm finding I notice the swear words in this piece instantly because they're censored (which also leaves me the annoying task of guessing which asterices mean what...) so I may be imagining it as being more than it is...

Mind editing it and uncensoring it? Nobody here has an issue with swearing

[melfen]

yea sure I take your point will put swearing in next time without the editing. Thanks for that.

[singersian97]

I kinda reworked the lyrics hopefully you'll like it. It's about a girl who cheated on and she did rrealise untill she knew about it and now it seems really obvious. The chorus should be a bit me up beat but not a lot and its quite a slow song. But you can completely change that.  Hope you like it. Siane xx

You got me good, yeah you did,
Now I’m alone and can’t sleep,
I’m just thinking about how we could of been.
C’mon get it together, I won’t take you back.

You got the best me,
I didn’t see,
The tricks you were playing on me,
Now I’m all alone,
Lying here,
Waiting for something unknown.

 The way you talked to me,
It’s hard to think how I didn’t see,
Now it’s so obvious,
You didn’t love me,
C’mon get it together, you won’t break me.

You got the best me,
I didn’t see,
The tricks you were playing on me,
Now I’m all alone,
Lying here,
Waiting for something unknown.

(You got the best of me, me, me)
(Now I’m all alone)
Waiting for something unknown[/center/)

[postmn]

its good lyrics, cos its something people can relate to,though you could add more emotion to your lyrics, with the way your word choice and structure keep em comin,