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Dead Give Away
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Caifx004
Busker
Posts: 26
Dead Give Away
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April 16, 2012, 04:09:06 AM »
Where has the money gone
When will this end
Looks like a congressional
S crew up again
To be rich or a puppeteer
Spending your life in luxury
Fellow man
Must understand
That’s the way it will always be
Dead give away
Dead give away
Got nothing to do
But plenty to say
Dead give away
Dead give away
Don’t you know
When the price is paid
Who’s got the ideas
Where are the clues
Doesn’t matter anyway
You’re bound to lose
Working so hard what do you earn
And meanwhile you’re getting burned
Who’s got the answers does anybody know
The God damned bureaucrats are running the show
So take your time
And take some more
Nobody’s ready
To slam the door
Dead give away
Dead give away
That’s the way it is
And will always be
Dead give away
Dead give away
And all the blind eyes
Will never see
Dead give away
Dead give away
They take it away
Then give it away
Dead give away
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The Corsair
Platinum Album
Posts: 863
I'm the latest model Johnny
Re: Dead Give Away
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April 16, 2012, 05:38:10 AM »
Hey man, might be an idea to post some reviews of other people's stuff before posting more of your own, otherwise people aren;t going to want to review your stuff
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Defective Elector
melfen
Busker
Posts: 20
Re: Dead Give Away
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April 16, 2012, 01:54:40 PM »
Interesting lyrics and interesting take on things. Sound quite indie and indie is coming back in fashion so write on.
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melfen
Caifx004
Busker
Posts: 26
Re: Dead Give Away
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April 18, 2012, 07:37:33 PM »
Thanx Melvin... I like to think you can take my work into different points of view
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postmn
Solo Gig
Posts: 362
I am not done listening to myself
Re: Dead Give Away
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April 28, 2012, 03:00:52 PM »
try and add a 3 verse, but its good, keep em coming
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Caifx004
Busker
Posts: 26
Re: Dead Give Away
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April 29, 2012, 02:37:01 AM »
This would be a fast song... Almost punk... So I would love to leave room for a killer lead before the last chorus... But once again I thank you for your review... I would like to know what you think of A Fact of Life ... If you get a chance to read it... Might be on page 2 by now... Thanx again...
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