Hi Everyone... !
I'm new to the Songwriters Forum and new to Songwriting altogether but I have an almighty passion for HipHop and would love to have a go at Singing/Rapping...
Below is something I've written, it's the first thing I've ever written and is a story of an event which happened in my life last year. It's only the first draft and I recognise a lot a work needs to be done on it still but I wanted to share if with you guy's to recieve some honest feedback! Your opinions whether good or bad are appreciated...
The song will mostly be a Rap but there are some Singing elements in there.
PromiseVerse 1
Son, please take a seat on that sofa
There's something I need to tell you before it's over
Promise to look after your Sisters and Father
Be brave and be my Soldier
I know you can and I know you will
Your my young man and my baby boy, still
Promise that you'll be there for me.
Chorus
Your my angel, your my angel
You are my only, Guardian Angel
I'll be here for you, you'll be there for me
I'll breathe for you, breathe for you
If you promise to guide me carefully
Verse 2
Now I'm struggling
With all the sadness and worry
how will I cope without you
preparing for the future without you
So much emotion that we've been through
So much emotion we need to get through
and I'm sorry for the pain that you've been put through
If I had one wish it'd be that you'd pull through
and only if Science knew how to
If only Science had a cure that would out do
one day maybe they'll be a breakthough
but that one day will be overdue
because time isn't on our side and that's sad for you
Your tired I know and I love you
I promise as your son I'll always look up for you
Chorus
Your my angel, your my angel
You are my only, Guardian Angel
I'll be here for you, you'll be there for me
I'll breathe for you, breathe for you
If you promise to guide me carefully
Verse 3
Now your gone
Gone forever
Just 42, who'd have thought we'd lose you
something you never want to hear, never
but it's for the better
because that pain you was in there's no getting better
No more pain for you and no more Heartbreak for you
I will stay strong and hide all of my emotion
Stay strong for our family and deal with all of the commotion
I will show devotion, take a forward motion a onward motion
I promise not to stay back or take a step back and not suffer from this set back
End of Verse 3 - Mini Outro
I'll stay positive, I'll stay positive, for the sake of my father and sisters I'll stay postive
I promise, I promise.
