Short Song Competition Entry - Yours Truly

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« on: March 31, 2012, 12:29:09 AM »

hi folks, here is my entry for the short song comp, try and stay awake..

http://soundcloud.com/nooms-1/yours-truly/s-LK5Wf

yours truly

theres a thorn in your side and i think i know who,
try hard to shift but you never can do
sometimes its an itch, sometimes its an ache,
but i suspect that its really yours truly

oh your mighty fine,
your mighty fine,
you can be my conspirator

in this funny old world you need an excuse
and i think you can call it yours truly
i may not believe this tomorrow...

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« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2012, 12:38:04 AM »
On my third listen already  ;D
You are a genius mate haha 
You blow me away every time :)
There are holes in the sky where the rain gets in  , but they're ever so small, that's why rain is thin.

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« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2012, 07:52:37 AM »
great!

gr.   Dan

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« Reply #3 on: March 31, 2012, 09:07:33 AM »
Love the feel of this, especially when the harmonies come in. Nicely done  8)

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« Reply #4 on: March 31, 2012, 09:49:52 AM »
Hiya nooms,

This is quite beautiful.  It's a strong entry for the short song competition.

Well done!

Paul
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« Reply #5 on: March 31, 2012, 10:39:25 AM »
Wow!! A great entry. This is brilliant. Seconded on the listens, i had to repeat a few times! The lyrics are beautiful and I love the way you sing them, full of emotion. Excellent stuff!

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« Reply #6 on: March 31, 2012, 12:51:21 PM »
 this is a whole different type of biscuit nooms!
your songs never develop the normal way or the way i hear them...you always go of somehwere different

 its a lovely song .... your vocals always do things to me....i love the sleepiness
tremendous short song ....its a great  munch......i ll have a packet! :)
Tell me Im wonderful & I ll be nice to you :)

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« Reply #7 on: March 31, 2012, 01:13:54 PM »
Hey nooms!
Cracking little tune you got there :) i listened a whole bunch of times because as you know i love vocal harmonies.. and man you do them so well. when they first came in they were good, but that last little verse was great!
I also really like your voice and vocal delivery, its not trying to be something its not, if you know what i mean. It sounds powerful without sounding strained.

The only negative i could say for this would be that the vocals in the beginning sounded a bit too loud compared to the music.. But hey, its probably just my speakers, sounded fine in headphones:)

Well done nooms!

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« Reply #8 on: March 31, 2012, 02:58:54 PM »
Yep Dankepig is right about that last part.
The way this builds is really fantastic. Small to big, stop. Brilliant  ;D
And those harmonies are great!
There are holes in the sky where the rain gets in  , but they're ever so small, that's why rain is thin.

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« Reply #9 on: March 31, 2012, 04:32:35 PM »
Wow bang on 1.30 ;D

I fecking love this Nooms - best vocal I have heard from you , nice backing vocals as well

First time I have heard guitar from you - you are some player ;D

Brilliant chord changes as well

Man I just love this  ;D
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« Reply #10 on: April 01, 2012, 01:37:40 PM »

thanks people
paul, gary, cheff, mwrabbit, domj..
i was cautious in putting it up as thought it might be bit low key compared to the opposition..so  thankyou

schavlee, dont you ever sleep ? thankyou for your fab comments, your a diamond geezer john

i wish that was true kaf, im a dodgy player really,  held together with string .. but as long as it doesnt notice, i wont say a word Pike..

tinam
this week it was date & apricot malted loaf, toasted...superb

thanks all for the comments
i may not believe this tomorrow...

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« Reply #11 on: April 01, 2012, 08:39:51 PM »
The tune is very sleepy and didn't particularly grab me. But the vocal, harmonies and lyrics are all very lovely. So a thumbs up over all :-)
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« Reply #12 on: April 01, 2012, 11:06:35 PM »
everything they said with jam on top .
are you going to do a full length version , that would be great  ;D
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« Reply #13 on: April 02, 2012, 06:18:12 PM »
I'm sorry to admit this... but I'm a little lost in translation, what is this song about? About being there for someone, or about taking the blame for the loved one problems?

Now the light is dimming, but we're glowing from within. We are shiny.